This place was an indigestible one
in her eyes
She was a shatterable butterfly
in it's eyes
Wimper,
she would,
when left forlorn
She needed certainty
And she needed somebody
She needed consoling
And she needed subscription
Whispered promises in her ear
Needed a hand to soothe her hair
And needed someone by her side
An assisting palm
Needed persistence to make
It through to the ending light
She needed contemplation
She needed consideration
Needed to be perceived
And needed to be known
….This girl needed to be loved
Author notes
I love your contest!!! I hope my entry is alright. Thanks for reading!
A contest entry
- Contest for many types of poems, Prewrites allowed. by Systems Malfunction.
500 points, ended January 30, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Not a poet! ...Quite :D What do you think?
Comments
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Such a simple poem and yet so clear and courageous in its intentions. The opening stanza is so carefully considered and the suggestion of a place being 'indigestible'is an interesting idea. The solution is obvious and stated beautifully.
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I think you should have correct stanzas and stay with the number you put them in. Just my opionin.Its was a good message though.
[♥]Nicotine.
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