I am a warrior and a man on a mission.
I'll do it my way with no mans permission.
My words are my sword and my thoughts are my shield.
My battle ground is poetry and my rhymes will never yield.
Knowledge of big words is not my thing.
But my thoughts in a rhyme is what I'll bring.
So draw your weapon and pick up your shield.
Try to take my mission in my battle field.
I'll fight you until your sword has been broken.
Battle you til there are no words left to be spoken.
This mission may end with the death of poem.
But I'll live to fight another and I'll send your ass home.
In a list
A contest entry
- Do You Want It? Do You Need It? Let Me Hear It.... Ladies and Gentlemen...!!! by JinSays.
725 points, ended March 7, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended May 26, 2008, 179 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What are your thoughts on this topic?
Comments
1 - 15 of 15
-
WOW
Your words were powerful and the rhyming was great
“Knowledge of big words is not my thing.
But my thoughts in a rhyme is what i'll bring.”
I’m a rhyming poet too and those two lines are the same which I would like to tell others about…
Keep writing
Shuberth
-
Thank you for entering my short poems contest. The contest states that the poems need to be ten lines or less. Your poem is more than ten lines.
-
lol i liked the last line it was good
-
hey there...this is Dani the judge of the contest you enter. i meant to put that i will be kinda harsh if not a little mean if i don't like what i read. i mean i like this...it's good but personally...i'm not saying you have to change it because it's your work not my own....i hate big ords like that. i read poems better when the words are in small print...like 12. but other than that i love lines 3-6, but i felt that you could have ended it better. good luck in the contest.
~Dani~ -
Oh Oh OH!!...My NEW HERO!!!! LOL..
Dayum this was intense.
Knowledge of big words is not my thing.
But my thoughts in a rhyme is what I'll bring.
Amen on that, I'm right there with you.
I absolutely loved the Fuck All Attitude in this. It fits the song, it fits my mood, and I'm just dying to see poetic blood spilled all over my screen..Fabulous!
Thank you so much for entering, I would love to see more of your work, after the contest closes..
Best wishes in the finalist list..though I'd have to say You probably won't need it..
Take Care, and Keep writing just like this
Peace!
Jin
-
Interesting. Great write, but I'm curious why you feel so combative about your poetry? Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest!
-
Fabulously well-done. I loved the whole thing
-
sweet
this is an awesome poem it flows brilliantly and i love how you have linked together your mind and things.(if that makes sense)
though im enterin this competition im sure urs will be better but good luck
-
Wow!! Am speechless. I think I would take the battle just to feel your rhymes. I love the style. This was greatly written.
-
Such a great poem, so bold and great with the picture prompt. You certainly are a man on a mission, Keep up the good writing. Thanks for sharing.
-
So draw your weapon and pick up your shield.
Try to take my mission in my battle field
yo yo spazmadelicausacious write my friend, and although there is alittle self defeat (tuning you into YOU is well with a G u r u ) within such armor, rhyme can lead to many things and well maybe the death if used by political spider pig aliens, yet reveal the mission (a brand new home dictionary?) might give this poem alittle more power sense, and yet i suppose the mission to flow the muse (and amuse ) is half the battle, as is, the end might need alittle thought or eaztension, perhaps 'flowen?' for shakespear made up words all the time and is what makes the mind of the english language so great other wise thanks for sharing da vine line big man time,
peace out and black berry pie
-JAS
-
after warrior add comma,delete and.1stline,
are,and,are 3rd line,(delete)replace with comma's.
and,will,4th line,(delete)replace and with comma.
and,7th line (delete replace with comma.
to be spoken 10th line,(delete) replace with unspoken
Hope you don't mind me trying to edit
seemed a little wordy to me though the premise is great. -
Nice
Send his ass home! lol
-
I love this my friend.Intense and thought provoking...
-
Hard to tell if this has ever been entered in other contests since there are no comments...looks like it needs to be read more too. Pretty nice rhyme and I like the ending
Adding your comment:
1 - 15 of 15
