Stubbed subtle silence
chemical drip drop
unfounded science
Remedy lacking
stranded in harsh view
absolved of what's pure
Drunken yet sober
indifference brought me
to this cold dark sight
Abandoned of touch
vacant within night
A contest entry
- Smile? by Exodus.
525 points, ended January 18, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Pass the vodka.
~Sigh~ I love it but it makes me sad. I keep reading it but every time I do I want to cry. Oh the curse of a good poet
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cool. a wicked read.
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nice, I liked it alot, well done man. I like the rythme and the fact that it's not so wordy but says so much.
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Very nice use of alliteration in this piece. Really tightens that smile we are all forced to wear now and then. Great take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest. ~Pamela
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"Abandoned of touch"
gosh that hits hard tonight.
I read this out like some beat poem - you can't even begin to understand what effect that creates!
Never ♥
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ha ha . It was meant that way. They are all 5 syllable lines. Can you dig it?
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oh ... does this suggest that I should go to bed? lol
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I am in a odd mood.. so I will just say No
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excellent work with the prompt This is really good.
I think you don't need much luck with this one lol.
Good luck though.
RedwingSpirit
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this is an amazing take on the prompt and is powerfully written. well done and best of luck bro
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nice work lol glad i inspired a title
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seriously though, great write, best of luck.
Tasha
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