I want to show you eagle’s wings
To engage your eyes on stunning things
A release of life; the unstirred mire
A new perception of loves raging fire
You don’t need my pity anymore
But I’m waiting; waiting at the door
I know your heart; I’ve seen your trial
And I care for you with an open smile
I want to show you eagle’s sights
To lift your dreams to dizzy heights
I want for you to have seen the view
I want for you to have been there too
And while you may try on your own
Refuse my help and sit alone
I want for you to feel the air
To soar the skies with your awesome flair
For I know of pain from feared things
So I’ll let you fly on eagles wings
Author notes
love has many forms...alot of them are blamed for heartbreak...but i dont think that 'heartbreak' is a result of love...but more a result of a lack of love....so i think this is the most meaning form of love.. - because i think love should make us happy.
I also think that God is the source of this love. He was for me, and he will be for you. These are his words to you, written rather imperfectly by me.
Take Care and God Bless you
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Written November 10th, 2003
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A nice flavorful reminder of "Johnathon Livingston Seagull"---Joe
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Wow, there isn't alot i can say, it just was sucha n amazin g write that i really am...speechless. It shows that you cannot hide love, and you must let it out...I can feel the excitement.
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I really enjoyed this pen. Such a comforting and relaxing read. I loved the usage of metaphor also. You did a fine job. This reminds me of a mother guiding it's young until that one day they grow their wings and fly. Beautifully written.......
Smiles
your way >>>>>>> Sandy 
San-d
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This is such a beautifully wriiten poem. This is a piece full of love and light. I think you did a really good job here. The rhymes were pretty good. And your rhythm was good also. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing :-)
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Yeah if only I could fly.
I surely know where I would
be. Very beautiful message
in this poem. Well written.
Thank you for sharing.
Jeannie D Hunter
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You did an amazming job with this... I thought it was very well written... I loved the rhythm, your choice of words, and your rhyming was fantastic!... I loved the imagery, very beautiful... Thanks for sharing this, you did a great job ... Keep up the amazing work, I can't wait to read more!
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Hmm. It was a good poem. The couplet form sort of disappointed me. It's hard for me to keep attention that way. It was a very good introspective on love though. Good write.
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i like how this read so effortlessly - i really liked it - the words, the images are all just great thanks for entering and good luck
shanelle -
Haha, I can definitely tell that you write in metaphors! If I could fly for real, I wouldn't be sitting around at a computer. I'd be out there, feeling the breeze and the drafts and getting sick. Oh all the places I would go. It's beautiful, how much faith you have in your beliefs. So many people let go of them to make sacrifices for other people, thinking that they can just pick it up again, but, once dropped, they sometimes never come back. You give hope.
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Thanks Yeah... i often wonder what it would be like to fly on eagles wings... but you know, sometimes i feel like i am doing...Things can be chaotic around me and seemingly terrible...but somehow I can't stop smiling... I feel just.. above it all you know?..as though actually none of it matters, and I know i'll continue to soar... I've been through some reasonably tough times in my life (well...not as hard as others)..but when I found God, (or He found me)... I just feel like that... It's a the best feeling in the world.. suddenly i'm not scared of the height i reach and i long to go higher...
I wrote this because I see so many people around me stuck to the ground because their scared of the skies... and my heart yearns to see them flying with me!...and it extends to everyone...including people i don't know...like you!! - Come fly with me, the view is awesome!
P.S. I write in metaphors
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Ah, if only human could really fly for real - that feeling is so amazingly relaxing, it makes me feel reassured, like someone will always be there to catch me when I fall. I have always been fond of four line stanzas and your rhyming words really put it together.
I like how you put all the senses together and give examples. The leaving out of much imagery on seeing what it is leaves one thinking. It allows one to make up what their idea of the skies you speak of.
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Whoa! This is such a great song! I could see this being one of those songs people sing at weddings, or dedicate to people on the radio. One of those,"I love you so much" songs. Great work!
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omg! i loved it. every single thing was perfect. the absolute selflessness and patience brings tears to my eyes. thank you thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. ~^~sunshine~^~
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bravo
this was very good, and it had so much emotion and inspiration in it. i really enjoyed reading this because i thought that it was creative, and you did a good job in writing it and presenting it. great job, keep it up and always keep writing -
I liked the message in this poem and the last two lines "For I know of pain from feared things
So I’ll let you fly on eagles wings"
But I do not like rhyming all that much in poetry, reminds me too much of crappy rap, lol. But all in all this was a pretty good poem, especially the message portrayed in it. Keep up the writing!
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Great write. Wanting someone else to feel free is selfless and honorable. I really enjoyed the way this piece was written. Best of luck in the contest.
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Very well written. I liked it alot. I haven't read anything like it really...unique and interesting. i think you did a very good job. thanks for entering. and good luck, keep up the great work!
Amber -
Yes! Love! This is what it means, to love and, yet, to still want those we love to soar, no matter what! This is just beautiful! I've soared in many ways, like an eagle, and spiritually . . . and all with love. Will def. be reading more of you! Thank you for sharing!--Kel I feel like I have wings!
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The voice from above clearly speaks through the words in this poem...You have a wonderful,caring heart. Well done
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Your poetry always leaves me in awe of it's beauty, flow and originality. Truely incredible; this cannot get enough praise and I'm not sure any of it is justice to what it shows. You are an amazing poet. You know- this would be a really romantic poem to give to someone (cloned- ever the slushy one). All the best with the contest- it certiantly is a stunning write.
God Bless,
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Wow, this is so great. I love how the words just flow together. It's so wonderful how you can do that, especially in the English language. Just wonderful.
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I'm so glad that I saw this in the promotion box, it's beautiful! Thanks for sharing this sincere offering of love and good luck with the contest at hand!
Naena
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lol- you probably won't like my take on it, but I kept thinking of an old adage-- "help is the sunny side of control". Glass
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Excellent
This is is an amazing write. Only because I cannot seem to write anything close to it. I could say things about rhyme and flow and all that, but I think everyone knows it rhymes and flows just fine. It is the sentiment in the poem that touched me. Beautiful, beautiful write. Thank you for sharing.
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this is great probably one of your best although i love them all.I normally dont read poems about love, not quite sure why but they dont seem to interest me, but this one did. mainly because the words were so fluent and teh flow was exceptional. I really enjoyed teh concept of your ideas. love and related it to flying on eagles wings. I must say the vocab for this poem is excellent i will have
I want to show you eagle’s wings
To engage your eyes on stunning things
that going through my head forever.
great poem/ beautiful poem
becky(you know its me because i put 'teh' lol)
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very inspiring...I like this poem alot...the words and the style just flow so well!!
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Nicely done on this. You hit each verse very well with using the meter with a tightness that rolls well from one line into the next. The only technical glitch I noted (I think) was the possession of "love's" in one of the versus minus the apostrophe to indicate its ownership of an item that comes later in the same verse.
Still, that's something that is far from detracting what you have here. Structurally and as far as use of imagery and being original- all so very good.
The theme itself- also inspiring.
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AMAZING! I've wanted to write a poem kinda like this for a while now, i just haven't gotten the time nor could I have done it that well, this poem is the best poem I've read in a REALLY long time. You're right on about love, heartbreak isn't a result of love, it's a LACK of love, something I've experienced first hand....kinda sucks when you love someone and they don't love you back =/ But this poem is like everything i've ever wanted to say put in a way that I never would have been creative enough to come up with. AWESOME poem! ~Jordan~
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This is great!! Such a wonderful, loving poem. It has emotion, rhyme, flow, imagery....perfect!!! I love it, it is one for bookmarks!!
. Super write, and this stanza was my favorite!!
I want to show you eagle’s sights
To lift your dreams to dizzy heights
I want for you to have seen the view
I want for you to have been there too
Great job, Welbis
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Very nice words there...very nice. I totally agree.
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I really like this. The way you wrote it was really great, and I'm loving the idea behind it as well. Don't think that i won't come back and read more! excellent job! -
that is a really sweet poem...for you to want to share the love
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aww thanks
take care gbu -
I like the poetic style in this soaring write. The last two lines in the third stanza mirror each other, but different, I like that kind of play in poetry. Very, very nice poem!
*Di* Thanks for your comment on my poem.
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Love is a double-edged sword... depending on who it is that holds the key to your heart, it can send us shooting beyond the heavens or bring us crashing down toward abyssmal nothingness. This is on the upside...reminds me of a time when I was actually in a relationship that enriched, instead of drained, my life... this is so beautiful! You are one of the good men that women all over the world look for. Especially some of us who have lost so much faith in love because of heartbreak that we have totally given up on it. Anyone who is willing to prop me up and show me that my life is worth living is a person I'd want to have in it forever, even if they are not my lover, because they give this otherwise futile existence some kind of purpose.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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This was incredible! Great images, thought-provoking sentences, and stunning ryhmes that tied it all together! The idea behind this piece was deep, stirring, and I appreciate your posting of this poem! Great work, keep it up!
AegnorMoonarrow -
How can I say it? Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful and powerful. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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This is beautifully impressive. I really liked this. You have a wonderful talent.
~*Destiny*~
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aww. that was so peacefull-feeling
i really like the rhyming too.
( By the way, thanks for the comment on my poem)
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thanks tina
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thanks - and worth was good - i liked it
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Interesting thoughts expressed here. Letting someone fly on eagles wings is a beautiful thought. To let them have the sky. To claim whichever piece of sky as their own. Giving them the freedom to soar.
Beautifully done.
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I appreciate your comments on "worth" but I am telling you this, if you can write eagles wings at aged 17, it is most impressive. Thankyou for sharing with me and thankyou for your kind comments
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the reason ive included pity in their is because its about comforting someone who is unhappy...and while they are unhappy and may reject the help...the love comes from still wanting to help them and beign their for them.....unconditionally
- it makes sense to me
thanks for the fear of things change though
and glad you liked it
take care gbu
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ah I like this, my only thing is ..I don't think it is release from life, but release to life Also ..pity doesn't fit into this equation ...seems you are equating pity into the solution of it ..somehow. Also last line rather than feared things ...fear of things ..something like that may fit your rhythm better. Nicely done though, it's sweet to offer a person this kind of freedom. Heroic love.
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thanks rasta - lol i wont stop cos i know u wont let me
thanks fallen and thanks 'NOT DepressingGirl' - oops b4 it said thanks fallen and not-depressing girl..which could have been misinterpreted..sorrry
take care
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:'( that is such a beautiful poem - the final stanza is a powerful and touching end. wow.....promise me you'll never stop writing! love Rasta xxxxxxxxxx
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This is beautiful, I really liked it's descriptivness (or however you spell it) .
Thanks for commenting on my poetry.
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love does make us happy...it makes me happy anyway! this is a sweet little poem, the rhyme scheme is really good, it flows well...its a nice one! I like it a whole lot
good luck!
~Fallen
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