In my fantasy-filled mind,
I can picture a wild party
attended by all of the assorted ‘shakers’
in my glass-filled china hutch.
The salt and pepper Dutch couple,
who never take their eyes off each other,
he’s dressed in blues, she’s in reds
and I can see them ‘cutting the rug’
in gleeful, wild abandon.
The prancing unicorns
with their golden horns;
the owl families,
of which there are many;
cats and kittens of all shapes and colors;
the Victorian women in their ruffled gowns
with matching parasols,
standing by the Elliot Ness cars;
the assorted angels, so delicate
surrounded by lighthouses
from around the nation,
many with beams of color;
the snowmen families,
with reindeer in various poses,
gathered around tiny Christmas trees;
tiny, ornate teapots;
animals of all kinds.
Many sets from the past
all crammed together on glass shelves
and the one ‘king’ presiding over them all
Elvis, in all his glory,
he is not at McDonalds
or on Mars, as reported,
but stands on his throne
overlooking his fans
in my kitchen cabinet,
his expression seeming to say
‘shake it, baby’.
Author notes
A POW contest entry
Theme: Salt and Pepper Shakers; collections
So many people have collections and a lot of people collect salt/pepper shakers. I have cut....way back, but the way they are arranged, I can 'picture' a party going on at night while we are asleep....lol
A contest entry
- Poem of the Week - POW by Arkbear.
750 points, ended January 17, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lol this one is cute, i wonder what mine do with all the odd and end ones I have, wow this is so cute, shaker and dumper as they say, good job...
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Thank you 'Moons'....glad you enjoyed this one and it brought a smile to your face.
blessings
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ha ha
nice ending for a well written poem . . cute party theme . . liked "attended by all the assorted 'shakers'" and "'shake it baby'" . . congrats on the trophy as well !
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Thank you 'carole21'. When you have a cupboard full of those 'shaker' collections, it does seem sometimes like they could have a life of their own...lol
glad you enjoyed this.
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Aaaargh, I never commented on yours either!
. Great images, superbly written, and completely unique!, (preferred the silver though), lol.
Congratulations pal,
kind regards,
Floorboards.
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Thank you 'Floorboards' for the lovely comment and applause. I am glad you preferred the Silver and got it...lol.
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This was a very unique, I like how your thought flows, pictures captivate all my senses from the very beginning. congratulations for gold!
~Sonja~
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Thank you so much 'Sonja' for the wonderful comment, applause and congrats. I appreciate it. Am glad you liked this.
This was a very nice surprise for me (especially since it came on my 1 yr. anniversary of writing...wow).
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First year of your writing? OH! Congratulations again.
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Thank you.
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Going from a deep and highly emotional poem to something so lighthearted and creative is one of the things I love about judging the PO contests. The imagination within your write is simply wonderful! I can picture this all so clearly that it had me looking at my own china hutch to see who might be “partying” behind my back.
My only suggestion is to consider breaking your last stanza into two or three sentences, as it seems a bit “run-on“ and requires a hearty breath to get through. A period at the end of the 4th line, maybe? I think you could split it up again once after that, but as always...just a suggestion.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us in the POW. It’s definitely a write you can (and should) be proud of.
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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Thank you so much 'trista' for your lovely comment. This write just 'kind of' happened as I was putting away my snowman set and getting out a non-seasonal set...lol
I will work with that last stanza shortly (I've been 'under the weather', plus I'm trying to run a contest to celebrate my first year of 'writing')....but I appreciate your suggestions.
again, thank you for your wonderful comment.
blessings
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OMG!
This has got to be the finest Theme I have seen in quite some time!
Imagery....Impact....Focus....Thought....etc.....all used in your entry to make this write stand out and shout....Look at me!!!
You have brought an incredible amount of vision here for us to read and appreciate ~
I hope you will consider making your way over to my new website when you have the chance ~
:)The Flow is so well done....but there are a few places where I could have stopped a line or two with a comma for more impact and more of that dramtic tone released......but you have done so well......so I am not going to say anymore...except.....Bravo!
I would have liked to have seen this entry in the POM!
The best to you and your entry,
Bear ~
Title 10
Flow 9.95
Depth 10
Theme 10
Feelings 9.75
Grammar 9.85
Presentation 10
Uncommonness 10
Sit & Ponder Affect 10
Ability to follow Rules 10
Bears Score: 99.55
Way ta go!
:)
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that smiley looks funny....did I hit the wrong keys?...lol
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Thank you so much 'arkbear' for that wonderful comment. (and I couldn't have entered it in the POM - it wasn't written yet..lol...I am trying to come up with something 'unique' each time - I am going to run out of ideas here...lol).
Is there a link to your new site? I will visit, thank you.
I am very pleased that you liked this, and real pleased with your score.
...thanks.
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You?.....run out of ideas????
....I highly doubt it my Friend ~
You are a Writer and a Poet......and as long as you have a full Inkwell and a fresh Quill.....and bring your incredible imagination with you.....you will never run out of ideas silly........you only have to slow down and listen to your heart.....it will speak to you and show you everything you need to know
Please, never give up!
Bear ~
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Hehe this is cute and made me smile this wide .Tha nkyou for sharing your poem with me and goodluck to you in the contest best wishes and much love
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Thank you Starz. I like to 'see' you smile...lol.
Much appreciate your comment and applause.
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Very imaginative and unique. A lovely poem...best of luck with it in the contest
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Thank you very much 'LadyDementia' for your nice comment and wishes. Best wishes to you also.
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This is so cool!
My uncle and his room mate had a salt and pepper collection.....I was so fascinated as a kid..this brought back GREAT memories (he died last yr at age 94)
Thanks so much for this...Best wishes in the contest!
Write on.
*PEACE*
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Thanks so much 'islekine' for the nice comment and applause. I am pleased that this brought some good memories for you. I have thinned and pared my collection by more than half, and it saddens me as looking at them does bring happy memories....oh well.
again, thanks.
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this is so creative!!! I love this. My mom always had so many nick-nacks like you speak of. And when I was little they did seem to have a life of their own. I loved this! Best of luck!!!
P.S. If judged on creativity...this would be very hard to beat!!!
Love~
Az
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Thank you so much 'Azlyn' for the wonderful comment and applause. I am pleased that you loved this (thanks for the comment on the creativity.)
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This reminds me of the "toys" that come awake when we sleep
Good luck in the contest....great topic
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Thank you so much 'cutiepie' for reading, the nice comment and the applause(and smiles, clappies and roses...lol..very nice, thanks).
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