That is not a request
for my ink does flow
in demanding tangents,
which can't be ignored.
It is for your best you understand,
my rules and thoughts
will improve and enhance,
so why not surrender
give in freely to each stanzas sway.
I would not wish to meander
through a mental mine field of portent
one might risk by disobedience.
All of this is to offer ultimate freedom,
perfect peace
because once you have
willing allowed my dominion
then you can live without need for worry,
just relax and enjoy
while I tend to all your needs.
Is servitude unto that noble desire
so much to truly ask?
You'll find in time
my shackles of restraint no longer bruise or hurt,
just as I did
when the one with power over my life
made it one of debased esteem.
Now I have inherited this process
from my progenitor and obey his legacy
otherwise there could be no calming order,
merely chaos from self determination's
futile fruit.
Author notes
prompt - control
A contest entry
- Quickie: Control by Laura-Critchley.
450 points, ended January 12, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats on the silver... i enjoyed reading every word of this poem through each stanzas sway...
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Congrats on the silver button.
A very telling piece I must say, it is a very well metred piece, well controlled to match the theme.
Well done.
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thoughtful
thoughtful . . congrats on the trophy !
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I think this is a good piece it is sad that so many people try to control the lifes of others knowing that what they do hurts thanks for sharing goodluck in the contest.Much love
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Great descriptions!
Well penned! There is often a price to high to pay for some things.
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