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rough before goodbye anyway

a squishy avocado
goes to surrender
of opener by nature

a prematurely apertured
uterus has inappropriate feeling
of who's around to peel leap

I have no window to rewind
it by, colors aren't in a drink
but of a tongue for no kiss in going on with life
except here is not hurt unless with our hour
of mindless faces not guarding think tick

a mother's nest is not in hair
just trees of harshness

too sad
toss and turn awake
but plaid of blank look
is blanket...

not a tacky desire
if could be taken

mention zone

Author notes

JUDGE I goofed all around if looking for every question. other than answer with verses why I came on mostly. A little more than that & I almost went over 20, felt the 'if I couldn't help it' and will be okay with a delete rather than edit after I realized and like it this way.

short on content? IMO AP is backwards in attaching rules at top of add a poem page, because once done you submit... below -- you don't ergonomically get inclined to go above piece worked on so often forget the guidelines.

if need be, maybe reentry could be based on that ha-ha.
or suggestion box with pop up window for rules while writing, mimicking them somewhat; like commenting gets that choice to be with poem directly for basing around quote or understanding.




good luck is a paucity for a pause

emoticons and the applause can't substitute comment words at all,
though rose is lovely without logoish

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  • Riftkin gold member
    January 14, 2008

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    joining AP is a wonderful way to write and have others comment on your work. I thank you for joining my contest. Riftkin


    • also called
      January 15, 2008
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      excellently grateful --

      Riftkin functional flow can be with you

      thanks for deriving need for communication. my husband read this and said I sounded depressed.

      I suppose I could go from a senryu around miscarriage
      I can move hips
      and energize arms
      yet why won't my smile dance,
      may open it to talk... and that wasn't work either.

      I appreciate the prize for offering a troubled abstraction,
      also called