And I saw them in the air,
These legions of angels,
As I shed my tears in vein.
It seems God has heard my cries of pain,
Sending his minions into this worldly domain.
All I can think about is my own death,
Hoping for this long awaited final breath.
And I saw them in the air,
These symbols of my hope,
But my soul has committed sin.
How can God truly still care?
I wish to take my life but he's still there.
Can't he just leave me to die?
The angel's reply asking why?
And I saw them in the air,
Not slaves but free spirits,
trying to make me see sense.
They try to help, but I chose to ignore,
I cut my wrist and soon begin to get sore,
They never leave even though I disobeyed,
I feel so afraid, but as they promised they stayed.
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woooww!!
this is awesome! and of course God still cares. He loves you no matter what!
Good one hun!! well done!!
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David.....wow. Beautiful. You've been my favourite poet for a while now, but this is breathtaking. I held my breath every second i read it (and now thanks to you my face is purple)
This poem is undescribable. We'll leave it at that.
Keep up the good work, hun.
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Great write
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i like it . reminds me of me and the way i feel about God
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Powerfull
I sometimes have the same thoughts that are in this poem. I have sinned or behaved so badly and hurt my fellow man I wounder how can God still care about me when I was so selfish and cold. Great write.
What I have come to understand is we must forgive ouselves move on learn from the mistakes we make and grow because of them.
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ahhhh another really great poem!!!
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wooow! brilliant idea for the poem too challenging and real good to put hope even in the darkest moments... i love this one alot!
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wow brill!!!!!!God is always with u.take some time and prayer to him..u write this poem frm ur heart!!!well done.check mine,cheers x x x
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You write really good poems on things that I'm sure everyone at least once in their life thinks about. This subject on God and whether or not He cares is such a deep subject that some choose to ignore it. I'm trying not to but the endless possibilities of him maybe not caring at all about us mere pathetic humans just about kills me. Great poem once again.
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ty for ur comment
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yeah no problem.
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idk ppl just read my poetry randomly i guess, lol
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haha, like me?! lucky!
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lol yea
I'm gd thxs just enjoying my b-day
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haha Happy birthday! It's my friends birthday today too! How old are you today? He's 18!
I'm doing okay. thanks for asking!
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17 and yw
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WOW..this was truly beautiful! I loved how you expressed your emotions so perfectly, I could relate to this very easily..amazing work
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wow....i have to say i can relate to this one...alot. your poems are amazing and you convey emotion so well. good job!
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ty for reading
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this is a really good write nice job
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again i love it. I really enjoyed the last stanza.
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ty for ur comment
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wow!
this poem was really good.. and touched me alot while reading it!!!!! please continue writing!!!!!!!!!!!! -
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Wow.. This is amazing.. this poems got to me-- "Tear"
U did a wonderful job!..I Love It!..... =]
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thxs for reading
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Dude, that's intense. I don't even know what to say. You probably already know what I think about this...
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well ty for reading and for ur comment
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Well Written
this is a good well rhymed poem but the contents are a trifle sad a good poet like you could write a nice happy love story with a positive outcome rather than a
morbid negative "roll on death" poem like this
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thxs for ur comment
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love you poems dude
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omg...
this had me reading for a while but it was worth it...you have such way with your words that it keeps me glued to your write! awesome job
-Georgia
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thxs i'm glad u liked it
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God always cares for everyone
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thxs for the comment
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this aint gud is super fantastic i loved it!!! i wish ppl would stay wen they say they will!!! later on i will post a poem kalled your my angel hope u chek it out!!!
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thxs for your comment and sure i will
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this is really good, its a amazing sense of reality
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Wow that was amazing. You are very good at showing your emotions. I know sometimes it feels like there is no way God could still love us after what we do but he does. It’s hard to believe. Outstanding!
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thxs for your comment
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Wow.
This reminded me of...
myself,
of when I used to cut.
And..
yeah most of the time
we keep sinning but God doesn't stop being there for us, even though we ignore him, but at the end..I ended up listening to Him.
Anyways, it's good that you wrote about this.
And it was great to read it,
very simple yet deep,
and painful, but holding a tiny bit of hope.
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I love this, really its so well written, and the spiritual effect in it is so beautiful, i truely love this poem. great job!.
I found myself thinking that i felt the same way. thinking how could god still want me after tearing my skin apart, ruining my temple. sinning, wanting so bad just to die yet.... gods still there with his arms open for me...
And there are angles who are trying to help me yet i ignore them, turn to a razer instead of a bible..
deep stuff right there... your a good writter...
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ty for reading
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i liked it
you sound like you understand what it feels like to feel hopeless and be lost even though you know you aren't
or maybe i am reading it wrong
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First three paragraphs nothingless than a great start, but the rest is weak, you can do better.
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this is pure amazingness. i love your faithe. i also love the intense emotion behind your words. -highfive-
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thxs for reading
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wow
awesome! you talented writer, you!!! lol
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i really like this poem
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thank u
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wow this was really deep but i loved reading it,it was really good and i loved it nice job on theis poem keep up the great work
~brooke~
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wow dave that was deep
another good write
love ya
ali
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thxs ali
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y arent u on msn
i have to talk to u!!
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okok
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this poem is nice to read keep up the good work you are a good writer.
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I like this piece, Such emotion poured out into this. Nice job
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i read this and was like wow i wish i could make ur life better like i talked about *tear*
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ty for reading
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I love it, your such a great poet
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ty glad u liked it
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Young poet
May I say i know this feeling only to well. My wrist and arms are filled with scars. I am an acute drinker & a man that questions life & God as we are taught . I wish for peace but realize it shall never be for me. But in your poetry there is hope. Write on & live on
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thxs for your comment man
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love it.. very well written ..
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thxs for reading
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