Control

Fighting, screaming, crying
as you hold me down
ravaging my body,
killing my soul
I think you get off
from the control
you have as you loom
over me tearing me in two
from the inside out

as I lay here

a shattered mess

you tell me to get up

get dressed and never

tell a soul, exerting

even more control

over me

Author notes

I know it sucks but it is my take on the prompt.

A contest entry

Quickie: Control by Laura-Critchley. 450 points, ended January 12, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Be nice!

Comments

1 - 7 of 7

By me, right now

Adding your comment:
storiesuntold
January 25, 2008

Edit | Reply

Such truth in this for so many
It tells of the horror so many young kids lives every day sad but true and them not knowing that by telling the nightmare would end so sad indeed
Sandygram
January 13, 2008

Edit | Reply

Good morning Nessa. A very heartfelt poem. No one should ever go through such pain and tragedy. My heart goes out to you or anyone who goes through such abuse. Hugs for you. You imagery was very vivid and told of the raw emotion one must feel in this situation. Love you, Grammy .
carole21
January 12, 2008

Edit | Reply

sad
sad but compelling take on the prompt . . like "as you hold me down" and "exerting even more control over me" . . congrats on the trophy !
CherryOnTop
January 12, 2008
Edit | Reply

U wrote a wonderful poem my friend....
quack
January 12, 2008
Edit | Reply

it dont suck and i love you mum huggggggggggs you tight
- SweetNessaLynn
  January 12, 2008
  Edit | Reply
  
  Thank you kiddo. huggggggggsss tight I love you too.
Laura-Critchley
January 12, 2008

Edit | Reply

This was exactly the type of control I was looking at when I wrote the prompt.

The Domestic Abuse/Rape element of control... amazing write and good luck =)