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Farce of a human; gorge-eyed, empty vessel

Whose martyred acts induce covert warfare.

Tear-armoured, each cataclysmic sob shakes my soul's constellation

And crumbles the fortress of my mind-

First subtly and then with vengeance and liquor-lipped mirth

And in the wake of my inner-destruction

She turns my world to gold

So that she; as the sacrificial victim

To the trenchant jaws of my insatiable hunger

And unending gloom

Can assign to me the culpability

For the ravaged state of her core.

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  • Cellar-Door
    January 14, 2008

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    So many lovely images: "soul's constellation", "liquor-lipped mirth" etc.

    I shake my finger at you for the rather emo background but give the yellow smiley things for the great poem


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    January 14, 2008

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    Small spelling mistake:

    'farce' -'face'

    Great write, deep imagery. Strong emotions.
    Nicely done

    .♥.
    Thank you for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


    • neitherherenorthere
      January 16, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment. It's not a spelling mistake, actually:

      farce /fɑrs/ Pronunciation Key - Show Spelled Pronunciation[fahrs] Pronunciation Key - Show IPA Pronunciation noun, verb, farced, farc·ing.
      –noun 1. a light, humorous play in which the plot depends upon a skillfully exploited situation rather than upon the development of character.
      2. humor of the type displayed in such works.
      3. foolish show; mockery; a ridiculous sham.
      4. Cookery. forcemeat.
      –verb (used with object) 5. to season (a speech or composition), esp. with witty material.
      6. Obsolete. to stuff; cram.


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      [Origin: 1300–50; (n.) ME fars stuffing < MF farce < VL *farsa, n. use of fem. of L farsus, earlier fartus stuffed, ptp. of farcīre to stuff; (v.) ME farsen < OF farcir < L farcīre]


      —Synonyms 3. burlesque, travesty.