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Cohen to the Sea

 
 
 
 
 
A full moon casts a splinter
cross the sea
 
It fills my quiet eye
between the marrow and the vision
 
And loosed from hollowed hands
these fingers drip into her ocean
they are buried under rib
with all the dark and lonely water
 
But the strain of night
so primitive
has patience in the empty
 
and the vast enduring silence
is not large enough
to hold me
 
So the mystery must write itself
of all her flawless mercy
as she leans across the shoreline
just to watch a needle's shadow fall
and speak with Mary Magdalene
and laugh at her approval
as she tries to pin the waves
together
 

 

To thread the secret marks
of need and want
 

those compass points of salt and history
that track her mask
within this book of tides
 

 
lapping slowly
as each of us ebbs
 

 

a gentle kiss of words
as shell to shore
 
 
that I might go to her by leaving

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Heart Sutra
    January 30, 2008

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    The last couple of stanzas are just absolutely gorgeous!


  • Naridill
    January 13, 2008

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    I like the ending - it does have the little 'unfinished' feeling but in a good way, as it isn't finished. There is always more to come and if you edit - you will never be happy with the outcome. As this has the ending you first wanted - the words that are aware that there is more and this isn't the end, just the end of a poem.

    If that makes sense


  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    January 12, 2008
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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 12, 2008

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    Am a new devotee of Cohen, having discovered him from this contest inspiration. I mention as cannot say categorically that you have captured a Cohenesque feel but for me you have and not lost yourself or your own voice either. There are the religious references, the quietitude,the assertiveness within the simmering passion and simple complexities, loved this,Bravo.


  • Tirrell
    January 12, 2008

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    very nice my friend, I like the cadence, flow and rich subtext that is laced through this poem, well done!

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