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Not Broken Yet

You came to me out of nowhere, just when I needed you

wrapped your world around me and then I said  "I do"

Nothing was as perfect as your hand gentle on my skin

you knew my thoughts before I did and everywhere I've been

I felt lost before I knew you, alone and not quite right

One moment in your love, not one more lonely night

Fearless as I lead, careless as I fly

Now that I know you, I'm not afraid to die

Life was not so complicated when your hand was in mine

I never felt more like a woman than when our bodies intertwined

You made me strong against a world so full raging tides

Took away so many fears that brought such hard divides

Thank you for your love, I hold it so close to my heart

Never so lost was I, the day we were ripped apart

Come back to me, my love, and fill my true desire

Give back to me my heart, make all of them all a liar

 

 

 

Author notes

My husband has made some bad decisions in the past, but is trying to fix them. I hope and pray he can. It's hard to live normally after 3 combat tours in the middle east. I am sure I am not alone in this.

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  • knot2tangled
    January 29, 2008

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    Sure would be hard to carry on such a long distance love!

    Seems like your heart is just breaking. This was very heartfelt & I do wish you love with your hearts desire.
    This has the depth of years of struggle put to poetry.
    Thanks for entering such a deep entry.

    Knot

  • juno0404
    January 12, 2008
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    "Never so lost was I, the day we were ripped apart
    Come back to me, my love, and fill my true desire
    Give back to me my heart, make all of them all a liar"

    The pain, the lost and the hope you hold on to, it's all so vivid here.
    You wrote this from theheart and the emotion is jumping off the pages.

    Best of luck to you.



  • penman gold member
    January 11, 2008
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    Excellent

    Very powerful words so romantic and well written. Best of luck in the contest.


  • any1
    January 11, 2008

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    I think this is a beautiffuly romantic poem. Filled with love for that someone special. The only thing I might recommend is in line 10, you could improve the flow by saying, "I felt more like a woman when our bodies entertwined." Just a suggestion