When you walk in a shadow,
Your life is full of lies.
Dreams pierced by reality,
And secrets realized.
The death tolls chime,
With every breath you take.
Whispers can be heard,
With every step you make.
Still images are clear in your mind,
With every tick of a clock.
Pity comes in showers,
And deceit with every mock.
When you walk in a shadow,
There's no place left to go.
Except for the warmth,
Of the place beyond the snow.
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Option 4. I hope it got you thinking.
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very nice!
I like the ending of this, and I think the tempo is really wonderful. Good job
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this is awesome!! thanks for the entry!!
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I really like this... :] Liked how you repeated "When you walk in a shadow,"
Loved the first three lines. :]
Flows really smoothly... And reminds me of that song... Something... I'll remember later. X]
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flow
yay poem! * hugs poem!* the word flow reminds me of that song Shawty got them apple bottem jeans, boots with the fur, the whole club was looking at her. She hit the FLOW, next thing u know, shawty got low low low low low low! oh yeah! thats me and erins song!!
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Interesting poem. I liked the way it flowed and the way you worded everything. Great write. ^.^
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intresting poem! I like the way it sort of flows! the ending was neat
There's no place left to go.
Except for the warmth,
Of the place beyond the snow.
I also liked this
The death tolls chime,
With every breath you take.
Whispers can be heard,
With every step you make.
great job! -
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thanx! first comment woohooo
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