I am the only
one of my kind
in the full deck
A black stain
sits where the
heart should be
I am held in the
highest light
Yet in some games
you are quick to be
rid of me
I am not adorned
with diamonds
or shrouded with
clubs
I am the over-looker
of my people
the leader
They come to me for
advice and protection
I am not the jack
of all trades
or the queen of
the palace
My king sits near
with deciet
in his eyes
A contest entry
- Fresh From Your Very Own Oven!!!!!! by DeLiShDaNcEr.
450 points, ended January 31, 2008, 13 entries
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I like this...It kind of makes you think of a deck of cards...lol, obviously :-) But I do like it. It's interesting in the way you approached it...And seeing that I've had a few quirky stories that I've written while not in the best of influences about the cards XP
Either way, I like it...My only advice is that you mihgt want to think about making the stanzas a little longer by combining them? I don't know...But I guess I just don't like seeing poems that have so small of lines...
Again, liked it and good work.
Slainte,
Mairin
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This is very interesting. Very different and something i, myself, would never of thought of. You do indeed have a beautiful mind, not a curse.
You write very well and very skillfully. I thouroughly enjoyed this.,
"My king sits near
with deciet
in his eyes "
I mean, come on, That's amazing.
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thanks.. i really appreciate it
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This is pretty cool.
I really like the play on cards.
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its amazing what boredom can make spring from your brain
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O and 1 more thing...capitalize you letters..and I meen this by like "i" should be capitalized anyway. Good luck again! o and i forgot this!
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I would have NEVER thoguht of something like this very interseting Loved it! Good Luck!
-Amber
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