On a psychedelic journey through my head
and it's a jungle in there
angels dust the joint that rests between two fingers
and I wait for the final judgment that they bring
but what is it, is that scale
merely justice or did you just not trust me
when I say I brought a gram
The thoughts are flowing smoothly
like i'm dancing in the rain
jubilation
elation
ecstasy
too many drugs
form a bridge in my mind
[morph] into the structure of my brain
chopping through neuron connections with a machete
burning out the larger junctures
gunna burn out myself eventually.
the smoke brings me back to reality for a moment
the joint's half gone--how much time has passed?
I look outside the window, and it's raining. still.
and I want to dance
I bet I could fly
but angel dust doesn't work the same as tinkerbell's dust
i only said that in jest but I realize
that one foot's out the window
and my muscles are tensed as though I'm going to jump.
and I'm ready for this journey to be over
but yet again
i didn't leave myself that option
I lay down on the tile floor and wait
to come down.
Author notes
THIS IS VERY SPECIFICALLY A CONTEST POEM: word bank is as follows:
jubilations , jungle, journey, judgment,jest,
justice,juncture, joint
lol sorry you had the words "joint" and "journey"
this was the first thing I thought of.
for the record: I know the lingo, but I don't do drugs.
Angel dust is PCP, which is kinda like LSD (acid), but worse to the health. It's got a bad reputation among druggies and straightedge alike, and unlike acid that bad rap is deserved, well deserved.
It's also called "embalming fluid" and is often put on joints.
A contest entry
- ~ Januray word bank~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended January 19, 2008, 7 entries
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how can i make this FRICKING RROOOOOOOOCK
Comments
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A very creative piece youhave written using the words given! I enjoyed the ride! Thanks for entering and best wishes!
Frogz~ -
This is quite an interesting poem that you have written here, with good use of imagery in fact
The overall feel I got from this poem was pretty good too, but here and there I'd do some tiny changes:
I would remove the word 'that' from the fourth line though smoothens it a bit 
Also, try to be consistent in your use of punctuation and capital letters
and last little remark I'd like to make: 'gunna' - if you really want to use chatlingo, I think it's 'gonna', but I prefer 'going to'
Thanks for entering the contest!
Leander -
I did enjoy this. The self questioning is usually beyond the hard core user. Self realization occurs the morning after, if at all. The ending is very good. I know several smackheads and dusters. The machete does it's work well.
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Nothing to be sorry about I wondered lol who would think of the word joint as a drug
you have expressed well within this write, truly your journey is clear
Thanks for joining in,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz
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