A lack of understanding around me,
confused faces and unending questions,
“Why? What? I don’t understand.”
I’m not the only who writes what others can’t feel,
not the only one with whom to confide.
A whisper of words to help, to see and feel what I too can.
Challenges, helping me reach my goal,
reading rhyme and knowing I’m not alone.
A new understanding,
what I have is more then just words.
We can feel, we can confide,
we can help.
There’s always some, who don’t look deep enough
the ones who will never understand
the ones who abuse what we feel.
But the best of all,
we have a stranger to confide in.
A contest entry
- Why Did You Join? by Riftkin.
600 points, ended January 14, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 2007 - everything under 25 lines by leander.
1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 167 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nicely written, a formidable job. You expressed perfectly what so many writers, and artists feel as they express themselves, and as they hear/see themselves expressed in an other's work. Very powerfully written. Great job, good job in the contest.
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I really like the last line of this piece
strong and thought-provoking words you've got in there
Leander -
joining AP is a wonderful way to write and have others comment on your work. I thank you for joining my contest. Riftkin
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Powerfully Moving!
WHOA!!!
This poem could move a mountain with the strength you have penned into it
I normally favor rhyming poems, but when something is written straight from the heart(as this seems to be),free verse can be a killer
This is definitely trophy worthy in my eyes
Thank you for sharing your talent with us and best of luck in the contest.
DT
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highligher of turns, clear with example
brightness needing to feel right
I don't know how I saw pup images passed from scrolled over side links towards your thus far empty page under comment box. but it correlates with reaction I had to this piece, hearing dog barking like picking a scab itching to be answered, which is an oxygen soothe to be out in open with another.
my favorite crafted lined is "A whisper of words to help, to see and feel what I too can" as there's a liveness to reading interaction with your breath so basic.
as well as knowing skill can be okay, "reading rhyme and knowing I’m not alone." without t being for insanity but straightening hints as last three lines broadens total as a tool.
It can resonate as deaf and mute finding communication's ear and mouth,
also called
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