Sitting in a state of wonderment, forcing reality to my exterior
Lustful nightly encounters, boarding on dementia
Denied this empty thirst, un-replenished within my soul
Frigid touches nestled within, appalling isolation unfold
Yet, this is how you left me
To fill this vacant desire, you watered with your nightly chore
Twisting my emotions, tumultuous to my core
Now you reveal these scathing annotations
Denied the passions that has wrought
Mischievous sexual provocation
Leaving this single thought,
of why have you left me?
Reveling in your selfish triumphs
Masticating this dejected heart
Bantering is your choice of defiance
Fallacies from the start
Utterance of I can’t and would never
This bond that coupled has been severed
Broken and battered you've left me
It is plain that I can see, my heart has truly left me
Divulging you playful intentions
A product of your invention
That keeps me barren and cold
The greatest gift you ever stole
My heart
Author notes
When you think about one thing and find that it was all a game.
When you put your all in to something and find that you all was all they wanted.
Can a heart rebuild when its always out to be broken.
Mykeee, AKA Lovable Swish, AKA, Keeee, AKA Loving son AKA,Honey brown molasses
In a list
A contest entry
- As Real As The Lies You Whispered Under Your Breath by Heartbeatsxfading.
300 points, ended January 29, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dangerously in Love by MzDimeDivia.
330 points, ended March 26, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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OMG
This was so emotional i thought that i was going to cry reading this piece this is so great i loved the way you said To fill this vacant desire, you watered with your nightly chore
Twisting my emotions, tumultuous to my core
Now you reveal these scathing annotations
Denied the passions that has wrought
Mischievous sexual provocation
Leaving this single thought,
of why have you left me?
It was so wonderful if i had time i would go back and read it again it made me just get chills up my spine so well written for a man. I see that you have alot of passion im going to be doing another contest soon keep in touch its going to be called Finding Love AP Husband
Lots and Lots of my love
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Thank you ( he blushed with a wide eyed smile) Emotional times brings on emotional writing. So glad you understood my vision. Much Love ~ Mykeeeeeee
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Wow it was so heartfelt and sad
But in a way it seem to open my eyes to the real world and the pain every one else feels. Sometimes we think that it just our selves that feel this kind of pain and sadness. Not knowing that around the world pain is every were. But we are to wrapped up in what is happening to our selves only. We walk around with blind folds.I love these lines they really spoke to me;
"Reveling in your selfish triumphs
Masticating this dejected heart
Bantering is your choice of defiance
Fallacies from the start
Utterance of I can’t and would never
This bond that coupled has been severed"
LISA
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Mykeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee, and all those other aliases you listed. LOL This is so sad and yet it is beautifully penned at your hand. Elegant verbiage created vivid imagery and such a smooth flow. Hearts are fragile and precious. To break them is a sin. The emotions rippled through this entire piece and I can't choose a favorite line here as the whole thing was fabulous. Thank you for sharing in the gift of your pen once again my friend. A most magnificent piece. Love and God bless, Joyce
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LOL!!! hehehehe. Thank U Sunshine! this was a blast to my brain and it dropped out. Glad U enjoyed it.
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Excellent
Very well penned. Shows such intensity and deep emotion. "Time is a healer, but the memories never fade" Keep up the good work
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Thank You so much
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*aching heart here*...if this is a fake, how rending must the reality be?...Sorry it didn't win in the contest, but it is seriously heartbreaking poetry, Michael. Spoken aloud it's even more powerful...made me feel like running over and giving you a big hug and telling you it'll be ok...Blessings, Rhonda
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I'll take that hug. UuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuH. Thank ya. This is a blast from the past. I read a poem and all that came to mind was how I was hurt a while ago. so memories can be really real. Thanks for great comment.
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incredible flow to this piece and there is a lot of intensity to the emotions conveyed - and what a range of emotions that is! this is incredibly well composed! especially, to me, the first two stanzas!
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Thank U - emotions are what sends the mind in turmoil. It comes to me in writing so I listen Thank U 4 the great comment.
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Wow riddled with emotion. Nice flow. Everyone has been through this. I definately had. Hope this is a LONG ago experience and time has made you strong. Write on, brother.
DEZ
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This is very very deep and emotional, the opposite of the contest requirements; but nonetheless its beautiful.
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Sorry - I must have read it wrong. Thanks for reading any way
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Deep Emotional
This is a very deep and emotional poem, it makes me said just reading it, no one should have to go through this. to have your heart not just broken, but broken over and over, and she still holds your love your heart. Only to continue to twist it at will, pulling the love strings giving you hope only to use those same strings to tie and torment all the more. This is a so sad, but excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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"The greatest gift you ever stole" I loved that line as well as the poem in its entirety. Wonderful in the way it portrayed provided with the imagery as well. Similar to my thoughts. Love the questions you ask in your author's notes.
But to me, the heart has the strength of a woman....think about it.
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thank u, thank u - yes it does
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thank u, thank u - yes it does
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Dynamic Son
You know life is never fair, and you captured the concept so damn well. I love how your metaphoric mind works....Your just like a skilled fisherman, each word tasty bait...the more I read it was to late. I was hooked on this poem; its just brilliantly composed...Your talent is like TNT lit, burning! Explosive! You rocked this read.......Mom
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thanks so much mom. This came to me in my sleep and I framed it around some poems I've read. Great fisherman analogy. This was pretty intense but without anger. Thats why I liked it. No malice just emotion. ~ your son
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WoW
I am left speechless, but yet intrigued by such mesmerizing words you have penned so deeply here, Michael. This goes over and beyond any thoughts that reap astounding measures of silent desires.
This is indeed a favorite piece writeen by you.
Great job on the mysterious imagery & thank you so much for sharing such beauty in your talent.
CoCO♥
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