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unfinished untitled scrap of genius

"i love you" is nearly offensive in its simplicity and lack of distinction
how can it cover what i feel for the one i'd call my soulmate, the one i'd marry if the time was right
as opposed to my friend with benefits whose shoulder has lifted me
from the deepest darkest depths
simply by being there to lean upon

how can i make this FRICKING RROOOOOOOOCK

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  • whits end silver member
    January 23, 2008

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    This is exquisite! You are right, how can the words "I love you" describe how you really feel about someone. It seems monotonous to me. Great poem! I don't think you need to do anything to this, but that's just me. I like raw work the way it is.