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Desire's Build

Lost in vastness
His voice calls
yearning pleasures
desires build up
like waves crashing
spilling forth foam
upon her tender curves
Her eyes close gently
with head back
accepting his kiss
with delightful gratification
She is his joyance
He's her ocean


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  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 16

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    lovely images played well with the picture. love the title. a good poem.


  • poppa
    October 4, 2008

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    just a beautiful poem sissy your imagery had me thinking of a first kiss, or the first time love struck
    Id suggest getting rid of the word "his" in the first line.


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    June 16, 2008

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    My heart sunk!

    This was beautifully written. With such passion. Your did a awesome job on the picture. Endeavor sent me your way, I am pleased with the poem I chose to read first! You are full of talent, I am so happy to read your work. I am so pleased. Thank you for sharing. Congratulations on your trophy! In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~


  • quantumsurveyor
    June 8, 2008

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    A sensual and satisfying write that touches all. I like the metaphor of the sea and waves - a bit Burt Lancaster and Deborah Kerr in From Here to Eternity, smashing writing. And thanks so much for introducing me to a new word "joyance".

  • deepheart
    May 3, 2008

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    An elegant showing of abandon and release, yet fulfillment and completion. All coming to a head in the finality of the words, "She is his joyance/ He's her ocean.


  • stavykm gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    Beautiful

    What a beautiful sensual write. I loved this and you so deserved gold but I'm glad you won a trophy on this one. I love the title Desires Build. Thank you for sharing your gift with me, you are a wonderful poetess!
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm

  • Liquid memories
    January 12, 2008

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    congrats on the award, well earned. i love the ocean, it gives me such inner feeling of power from the roaring and crashing of the waves. so insignificant, really nothing in this vast universe.you have done this justice. thank you for sharing.


  • Tarja
    January 11, 2008

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    Short and sweet... elegant as the picture itself. You really amplifies all the passion that was painted into the picture with your poem... this was gorgeous. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    January 11, 2008

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    Ah, I liked reading this.
    Thanks for sharing & good luck.

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