10th December 2007(Night)
Another night is going on,
Empty headed, heavy frown
Another life is passing on
To be in darkness to mourn.
29th December 2007 (Morning)
Seeing the world as you do
Feeling the mistake causing me blister
Searching you here and there
None to receive my calls.
5th January 2008 (Morning)
Withdrawn promises are making faces
Deserted heart that fears to meet
Seems I am running in a cursed race
Nowhere to reach, nowhere to end.
11th January 2008 (Midnight)
Come to see this broken one
Badly in need of your touch
As pure as all sins are gone
Dare to call you by your name
Realization
“If I died tomorrow, knowing I would cause you pain today, would you still love me?"
Final Realization
“I Love you Terribly”
Author notes
I want to dedicate this poem to my beloved whom I have caused to suffer terribly. This is an attempt to let the person know how much I care.
And the title " Final Countdown"
"The Final Countdown" is a 1986 hit single released by the Swedish glam metal band Europe. It was the first single released internationally from the album.
A contest entry
- "My greatest hopes and fears are centered around you." by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 19 entries
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BRAVO!!
Beautifully written! Good luck! -
THANKS A LOT THAT YOU HAVE LIKED RADING MY POEM...
IT'S REALLY VERY KIND OF YOU! -
I really liked this poem, I like the layout. I haven't really read all that many poems that have the story layed out on all the different days like this one is. I really like that you took the time to get all of the feelings into this piece in just 5 stanzas, some people write forever and still don't have this many feelings. Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest.
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I really like it.
Love is like a delicate teacup, so beautiful, yet so easily damaged.
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Thanks a lot Shapla, its my pleasure that you have liked it.
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simply superb dear.from where do u bring these ideas actually?It really is a very very well written piece and of course the emotion behind this is swelling in every word of it.
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Thanks
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I really like this piece, how you have worked the prompt. The ending suits perfectly
Well done and thank you for your entry x
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