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Haiku: Fog

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Look outside! The fog,
dividing me from the world
like a paper screen.


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i looked out the window today and saw the fog.

whachu think?

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  • Pollycheck
    April 1, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my haiku contest.

    Look outside! The fog,
    dividing me from the world
    like a paper screen.

    This has a very interesting theme to it, but it seems to be written as a statement rather than the sense images of a haiku.

  • staticshakedown
    January 13, 2008

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    Oh, I really liked it~! You really evoked the feelings of looking outside a foggy window in just 17 syllables


    • The CheshireKat
      January 14, 2008
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      tyvm! i haven't written a haiku in forever, i was so hoping it would turn out alright!