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Cold Crescent

 
 
 

 

 

The sky has a splinter
tonight,
a pale thorn pressed
against belly,
 
hiding Her Iceberg-face.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    January 13

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    You're writing is good lately, but very haunted. Forgive my lack of comments, i can only see the cool descriptions of your muse so many times .. and comment so many times, as we both know these are quite personal.

    Wonderful writing as always.




  • Naridill
    January 12

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    Although the last line puts me off a little ~ this is absolutely succulent. The words thrive my mind to what we create and re-arrange to suit ourselves. Beautiful.


    Thanks for entering - much luck.

  • ardentMarch gold member
    January 11

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    excellent brevity.....(we have to do a quickie some time again soon..that was so much fun!)..


  • alexandrathegreat gold member
    January 11

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    I really love the imagery I get when I read this. Though I think the sky is perfect. I can now see it as marred with your descriptions. Beautiful.


  • Cat gold member
    January 11
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    beautiful.. you do succinct amazingly well...

    the splinter and the thorn..

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