Surrounded by walls
These empty walls
Void-less and nothingness
Fill these walls
Stale trapped air
Attempt to escape
But fail to
Complete its mission
My thoughts swirl
Behind those walls
As I feel trapped
Behind those empty walls
I have tried to escape
But to no avail
As my thoughts of escape
Bounce back in my face
Being concealed behind these walls
Have given me time to think
About all that I have done in life
Cornering the darkness in my mind
Channeling it to a better place
As I contemplate
Do I want to escape these empty walls
Or do I want to stay here in confinement
Till my life ends
Where no one will ever know
What happened to me!
Author notes
the song Empty Walls by Serj Tankain Is what inspired this write out of me!
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I like it. I believe that many of us are defined by walls.... wither those we build, or those we wish to break down. ~Jim
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I enjoyed reading this. Great job.
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yes
feelings and contemplation conveyed wonderfully. i really love the song and it's great that it could inspire you to write this. you saw from behind those empty walls like serj asked. -
wow i loved this!
i know how that feels sometimes.
wow. -
I can already relate to this poem just by the title. A mark already...attempt should be attempts... umm...Where no one will ever know...I don't know why you added the word where...it doesn't fit in the thought.
Aside from those things...the thoughts are grueling and fascinating. It may be depressing but we all find ourselves stuck at times...and personally I've always had empty walls. -
that song is pretty nice. not as amazing as music praised like that should be though.. in my opinion. not saying its a bad song or anything.. but rage is alot better.
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peace.
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I love this write, you have no idea how much I relate! All the feelings, thoughts and describtions - it's like I've seen and felt it all! It's very well written, and I love it!
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