How satisfying this fond illusion
sky and clouds,
a delicate canopy
floating whites and unteachable blue;
Unbelieving flower, petals
of white learned from stars
and blue captured from a quiet sea;
reaching for feeding sunlight.
Textured skies and fluffing whites
are naught but tantalizing promises,
sweet water and gentle breezes
touch and lift rich essence;
making soft spring air,
streaming invitations to life.
In a list
A contest entry
- A Shot of Creativity - Photo Prompt #1 by Aussie Gypsy.
450 points, ended January 13, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Indeed a wonderful poem this Sky of yours. Very soothing visual and pleasant thoughts
Mari
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Very nice
I was going to say , so much better than the real thing but couldn't bring myself to. Such an evocative piece
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I cannot rate the comment so i am happy to reply and simply say thank you for your most kind words, it is so very much appreciated...PK
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Congratulations ...
on that shiny gold trophy. It does serve as a validation of your excellent writing ability, but, of course, that is a given anyway.
I see your cheering section agrees with me, so there's not much to say that they haven't covered.
Good luck with your writing in future.
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This was one of those occasions whereby I find one of your poems and that leads me to another, then another...until I just have a head full of impressions rather than specifics. I love the gentle quality that you seem to imbue in your choice of words and the quiet atmosphere. I love those contrasts 'floating - captured', 'unteachable - learned'. This is a little gem and not surprising it was a gold trophy winner. I would like to add you to my favourits, I hope you don't mind. Regards, Andrew
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Soft and satisfying...
there's a magic to personifying colours
that draws me in always. I love the intertwining
of texture and meaning, colour and season.
I see it has earned its shiny star. Blue
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Excellent!
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...PK
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Sky...
this is awesome Peteskid!!! congrats on the gold trophy!!! have a nice day, -slick99
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amazing!!! i felt every word.i saw the sky right before my eyes...and it gave my heart such peace!i felt i was dreaming.excellent piece!
juliet
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Yes, a tantalizing promise and mere fond illusion, maybe. But I have much respect for the flower. For she is gleaning all she can from clouds and sky, she is ever-reaching for the sun. And I believe she will answer that streaming invitation, and be filled with the sweet waters she needs to grow.
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Seems like the perfect sky. Cotton white clouds forming figures in the sky...and the figures are just what we want to see. We can actually make them change to anything we like, just need a little imagination.
This is a gentle poem written in beautiful words.
Mari~~~~
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I loved reading this. It gives a sense of calm and peace. I found myself floating through every word.
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Wow that was so wonderful I floated right through it on nice stream of cottony clouds.
Thank you for sharing. I love nature poems.
Lauren
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This is so dreamy and congratulations on the gold trophy you got for it. The imagery is fantastic and the award is well deserved. You just float through this like you are one with it. Thank you for sharing this with me and keep writing poet. You write from your heart. seamaiden ♥
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Another stunning, captivating piece. The imagery is perfect in this piece. I love the "unteachable sky". I would never have thought of using that, but you did and it works. I love how spring just came alive in your work here. Fantastic work.
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this is such a sensational and stunning piece. your words are filled with such beautiful imagery. well done on the shiney gold.
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This is Sensational!!!
Stunning in all its quality.
Well done and best Woooo Hoooo on the shiney golden beauty.
Delila
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a very beautiful piece .... very peaceful images & great how all the images have a feel of interconnection to the earth and us. with this poem, one forgets the harsh winter that just passed & that other harsh winters are on their way ... one just revels in the renewal. congrats on the gold.
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wow! beautiful. the imagery here is superb. no doubt this is really a winning piece. i agree, the following lines are great:
Textured skies and fluffing whites
are naught but tantalizing promises,
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The imagery of this piece is fantastic!
I especially loved the two lines below:
"Textured skies and fluffing whites
are naught but tantalizing promises"
Congrats on the gold
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Thank you for reading and taking time to leave such a lovely comment...'skid
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Wow... This is really good... I love your imagery... It really puts me in the moment... Paints me a beautiful picture in my head... I love how wonderfully done this piece is... It's beautiful... Wonderful... and any other word that would mean the same thing
~ Amazing...
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Thank you for your comment, very kind words, so much appreciated...'skid
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Great Imagery
You deserved the gold! This is really good! I like it a lot! Good job and best blessings -Fate-
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Thank youfor taking time to read and leave such a thoughtful comment...'skid
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Great imagery! You wrote this beautifully! Congrats in the Gold.
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Thank you...'skid
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Congrats on the shiny. Very nicely written indeed. Great imagery and beauty. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading and a lovely comment...'skid
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Whoa! A wee yellow vase! Kinda makes me seem stupid, seeing as I was going to question elements of this poem (such as, I don't quite follow "unbelieving" in this context).
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good to know that you are there reading and questioning, a great comfort really...thank you...'skid
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WoW
a beautiful poem that forces one to take a step back and veiw the world from a different perspective and actually appreciate the beauty that nature in its purest form has to offer. thank you
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thank you so much for reading and leaving such a thoughtful and pleasant comment...'skid
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This is such a beautiful piece of thought penned. Lovely use of imagery and depth to create such vivid tranquility. Wonderfully penned!
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Thank you Wendy-
for your kind and generous words, and for taking time to read..it is always wonderful to hear from you...'skid
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Hmmmmm ....
another Gold. Perhaps you should give me lessons on how to write poetry.
I don't like "feediing sunlight" for some reason though. Everything else works fine, but that line just bugged me.
Oh well, the contest judge didn't mind. Congrats.
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I like your point of view on this, thank you so much for reading and the helpful notions...'skid
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Very nice.
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Thank you Jaden...'skid
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I like how you point out that the sky is an illusion, and then go on to say how beautiful an illusion it is. Many see things for how they really are don't usually appreciate how things seem to be.
Wonderful imagery, and so eloquently spoken. Well done!
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This was stunning. Well deserving of the gold it received.
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thnak you for reading... for your wonderful encouraging comments...'skid
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Thank you for reading and your most welcome comments, it is always wonderful to hear from you...'skid
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You are truly bursting with beauteous poetry these days my dear. Not to suggest you haven't always, but these days... Elegant!
Congrats on another Gold crown!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you Renee- i think we all have moments when the writng is easier and feels better, but the reader seems to tell us whether it came out well..so wonderful to hear from you...'skid
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This has exquisite imagery in it, you took the prompt and brought more beauty than was captured within it... beautiful
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
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Beautiful imagery...sunny
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Very imagintive, every word following the next painted this wonderful sky. I've looked at the sky before and sometimes forgot how beautiful it is. Life gets pretty hectic at times. I was driving on the highway the other day and of course in a bit of a rush and all 4 lanes came to a stop! I don't know what made me want to but I looked to the sky and it was magnificent! It's like most people never take the time to just view whats already been given to us. Very nice write. But I have to say my favorte line was "petals of white learned from stars" unique Keep up the wonderful work. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Autumn-
yes looking up at the sky in a traffic mess, lemons to lemonade there...wonderful to hear from you...'skid
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The sky: always a point of inspiration for many writers. I liked this one. I was beautifully written and had wonderful descriptions. Very nicely done.
I enjoyed this one throughly.
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Wonderful description, color, imagery. I thought this was marvelous: "petals
of white learned from stars
and blue captured from a quiet sea;"
This paints a lovely picture, very warm. Good luck in the contest!
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Ah you just touch this heart when you write so softly. Love, C
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