Swirling flowing liquid
Oozing, creeping slowly
Lying face down
Eyes glisten brightly
Cramping, crackling skin
Peeling outer layer
Blank wide face
Mouth gaping open
Numbing pain throughout.
An induced stasis
with uninduced cringing.
Shrieking, wailing bats
Bell toll creepers
Clouds hued blue
Full moon light
Shadowed swaying trees
Rooted deep down.
Howling for blood
Midnight creatures coming-
His dread revealed.
Clicking claws torment
Snarling guttural yips
Searing, painful stabs
Sharpened playful nails
Keen edged teeth
Feeling the crunch
Breath fading, faltering
Warping body shape
Loosing form rapidly
A blank stare
Inability to cry
Limp limbed retching.
Non remorseful mouths
Ripping, shredding, chomping
crash of limbs
dragged feet first
Crying for a savior.
With no hope.
With no future.
Pacified.
Putrified.
Author notes
-Treagal-
A contest entry
- Make me feel agony and pain by Alexis Manley.
360 points, ended January 11, 2008, 5 entries
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Comments
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A very well written piece.
Thank you for your entry.
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Descriptive and morbid. Very good writing you have here.
"crash of limbs
dragged feet first
Crying for a savior.
With no hope.
With no future.
Pacified.
Putrified. "
The ending was very strong, I love it. Thank you for entering this. :]
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Nice and gorey. I like the were feel of things. Like the line, 'limped limb retching'. Pretty gross.
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for some reason this made me think of castlevania 64 and nightmare creatures 64. i liked it, it felt like a record that kept skipping on a really creepy song
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icky! Happy halloween!
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wow. I really liked the descriptions used in the poem! Great write and thank you for entering my contest! Good luck
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