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The Rain's Tears

Unborn life lay in the womb,
Already placed into her tomb.
A child of injustice, born to death,
Never will she take her breath.

Cradled with her darkest fears,
Silenced to her mother’s ears.
A voiceless child, tormented from hate,
Her dreams and wonders erased from her slate.

A child that could be of rare beauty,
Damned to death by cruelty.
Suffering she cries, but no one hears,
Only she’s seen through rains sorrowful tears.

Author notes

I won second with this poem at a local contest Yeah! What do you think about it, its okay to not like it btw

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • bruntbeauty
    June 2, 2008
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    It was perfectly written, and I assure you that someday pro-choicers will see their wrong-doings.


  • ForeverLastingComa
    June 2, 2008
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    i love the flow and rhyth of this poem....my favorite lines were the first stanza,

    "Unborn life lay in the womb,
    Already placed into her tomb.
    A child of injustice, born to death,
    Never will she take her breath"

    interesting message...

    thank you for entering and good luck

    ~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~

  • roflaura
    June 1, 2008
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    "tormented"
    Abortion is not Guantanamo Bay,
    watch the words you use.


    • PonyPride
      June 1, 2008
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      actually, I find not being able to ever live your life and having someone decide life or death for you to be torture, sorry


  • DAMSELx
    May 30, 2008

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    Whether you are pro-life or pro-choice, there is no denying that an abortion does rip away a child's dreams and wonders and future of hope.

    Thank you for your entry, a very nicely written piece.
    --DAMSELx


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Thank you for your very sad entry in our contest, it was extremely good and a pleasure to read.

    Please join us in our future contests, we look forward to reading your entries...

    Sue and Jeff

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