My feelings for you words just couldnt say
Not only because there are to many Im scared you might go away
Im scared you wont feel the same
You might think Im lame
I cant afford another heartbreak
Especially not from you
I would lose my mind
Theres no telling what I might do
I put my heart and soul into making this little secret of mine
What would I do if it got out
But then again you could agree and love me that'd be fine
But still I cant take that chance its not what its about
So for now we will remain friends
Your thoughts with you
Mine with me
Our love can never be!
*dedicated to someone I love truly and just met*
A contest entry
- Pre-writes & Fresh Writes Welcome Here! by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
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300 points, ended January 13, 2008, 48 entries
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Be honest?
Comments
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This is a great poem you have a lot of talent. i made changes below to make it flow better. you can use them if you want it's up to you. watch words like dont cant they should be can't or don't some contest are picky about it. keep up the great writing.
My feelings for you i just couldn't say
Im scared you might turn and walk away
In fear you wont feel the same
You might think Im lame (cliche)
Can't afford another heartbreak
Especially not from you
I would lose my mind
There's no telling what I'd do
I put my heart and soul to make this secret mine
What would I do if it got out
(But then again you could agree and love me that'd be fine
But still I cant take that chance its not what its about) too many words in these to lines)
So for now we remain friends
Your thoughts with you
Mine with me
Our love can never be!
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thank you for entering
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I agree - very self explanatory. I like the beauty in honesty. Nicely done indeed.
Thanks for entering.
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Hmm self expanitory
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