the sharp sting on my neck
starts my heart racing
that devils kiss ignites my passion
so enticingly dark
my blood starts to boil
my skin tingles with excitement
I'm drawn to this darker side of me
so sensual and inviting
i can not resist the unknown feelings
that devil's stinging kiss can bring
Author notes
not sure if this is what your lookin for but i gave it a shot and tryed to shake my writers block
A contest entry
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nicely penned my friend very dark and seductive indeed.. great job!
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Commentary Critique
First, the misspelled words/grammar: DEVIL'S; SENSUAL; INVITING; EXCITEMENT.
Now for the write itself, it was subtle enough to where the images managed to show off in the readers' minds -
I like this poem,
not erotic...... but
headed in that
direction
enjoyable read for me. -
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thank you for commenting and im glad you like this poem its the first one ive ever written like this and yey me it won a gold
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Super poem. Your depiction was perfect, you nailed it. I loved the flow, great penn. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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