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Kinky Death.



Drip.

 

Your body's icy cold, underneath my fingertips;

face, just a bloody pulp, eyes wide open,

shocked, traumatized, neck gaping,

cut open your jugular [an instant kill].

Hair matted, oh so very pretty,

posture heineous, disturbed;

legs sprawled open,

arms raised above head,

tied together tightly in a bow.

Lips so delicious even now,

let me open you, taste you,

capture you deeper.
Your endless night arouses me.

Your blood is on my hands,

dripping between my fingers.

Let me fuck you once again,

a last time of intimacy,

with a body that taunts me.

I dump your crumbled body,

in the river 5 miles away.

The icy water goes well,

with your icy stare.

I'll wash my hands clean,

say nothing to noone;

live life as before,

no blood is on hands,

I'm not guilty.

It's a shame I can't return,

to taste you oncemore.

You're my ultimate obsession,

that led to your death.

Don't you wish you said yes,

when I demanded sex?

Have a nice time in hell, baby,

I'll be joining you there soon.

Drip.

Author notes

Umm yeah, this is kind of f''ked up, to be honest with you. Would NOT advise the faint hearted to view this one. Been watching too much Crime channel, me thinks. The books at 3am don't help either, I doubt.

x Empathic Rose x

Title: Kinky Death

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  • Miss Macabre
    June 24

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    Love it. So sadistic, this was an awesome poem. I like the drip you added at the beginning and end. Thank you for entering and good luck to you.


  • RareFlower
    December 7, 2008

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    kinky death

    What an amazing write, so dark. The story just unfolded. You have an amazing play on words. Thank you for entering the contest.
    RF

  • William T. Masonis
    April 12, 2008
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    Nice.

    Nothin' like writing stuff that makes you wonder about yourself, is there? That's why we do this kind of stuff, it keeps us sane. Anyway, a well-crafted piece tied up neatly top and bottom, like a gift. You got the nature of the lust killer type down just right.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    Congrats on all the shinys!

    Wow, fantastic piece, I love it! The visuals are so graphic and raw, awesome to read first thing I know what you mean about reading the books, I think I read to many of them..lol. Superbly done, good luck


  • Wearychild
    April 10, 2008

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    WTF!!!!!!!!

    Wow! This is EXACTLY what I wanted, something twisted yet beautiful. Thank you so much for entering, you absolutely MADE my day. WOW!


  • IFeedFromHisKiss
    January 31, 2008
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    i love it


  • Naridill
    January 19, 2008
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    Wow~! very kinky indeed. And what a last line Very intense and beautifully scribed.



  • Shikamaru-Nara
    January 18, 2008

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    Er... >.>

    This doesnt scare me but it's a wonderful write. If anything, it arouses me.

    Have any other works? I think you'd qualify if you stayed on the right page (Read that winner in the other contest that I state).

    Ta-ta!


  • cfh1167
    January 18, 2008

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    To me its a bit amusing.Your choice of words are funny,not in a bad way,in an intresting way.Overall I like the sadisticness in this poem.


  • Timespell
    January 18, 2008

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    Hehehe...

    You gave this piece a very nice twisted edge... Which I always like to read.

    All the best,

    ~T.S~


  • Dragon Tamer
    January 14, 2008
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    Awesomely Cruelistic!

    WOW
    This is an awesomely cruelistic look at what can and does happen in life. Although I am a fan of rhyme, this is very good written this way It lets the reader feel your sickness or should I say his
    Thank you for sharing your dark side with us and best of luck in the contest.
    DT


  • SchizoChic
    January 14, 2008
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    A sick twisted mind you have there darlin' .... Good work. This is what I like.


  • So Strange
    January 12, 2008

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    Hmm...the wording and flow of this poem was really well done, Stefanie. I think it was really well described and kind of gruesome, though, but you still did one hell of a job with this piece of poetry.

    Keep up the great work, Stefanie. I look forward to many more of your future stories and poems. Or poems that sometimes seem like stories.

  • Labefaction
    January 11, 2008
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    It is beautifully disturbing. Great poem!


  • ForgottenFairytale
    January 11, 2008
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    love this one!!! its creepy, yet cool. love the descriptions.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 11, 2008

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    hmmmm, this is something i like it, and yea it kind of is f"ked up but yet i like that kind of stuff, so keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • lost in silence
    January 10, 2008
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    holy fucking shit!! I love it but it's really fucked up. Great job!!


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    January 10, 2008

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    I love how distant this is You could be a sociopath and no one would even now Cool! Very amazing though, and just wow really.

    "You're my ultimate obsession,
    that led to your death.
    Don't you wish you said yes,
    when I demanded sex?"

    I love it!
    Best of luckies in the contest

    ♥Bandaid


  • Wulfareika
    January 10, 2008

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    Wow I fucking love it!
    I wrote a poem vaguely similar to this and got told I was "glorifying rape" which is bullshit, just because the muse is feeling a little dark, doesn't mean you believe in/would do anything that your poems describe.
    Yeah anyway, I adore this, it's nothing short of brilliantly fucked up and wonderfully twisted, and I love it XD

    Best of luck in the contest!


  • Snow White Sorrow
    January 10, 2008

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    Filled with emotion and insanity. I love the line "You're my ultimate obsession".

    The icy water goes well,
    with your icy stare.

    Love this part the most, it goes so well.
    This poem sent shivers down my spine, a brilliant write.
    Love ya sis x


  • shadow-cry
    January 10, 2008

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    I love the coldness of this piece especially: "Lips so delicious even now" It's so sick and twisted that it turns out to be an interesting read!


  • Nicotine Eyes
    January 10, 2008

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    Contest Holder

    "Have a nice time in hell, baby,
    I'll be joining you there soon."

    WOW. I Love It!

    [♥]Nicotine.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 10, 2008

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    woah sis this is a graphic and powerful death and one memory to die with lol. an awsome take on the promt kicks my entry out.


    • xxRainbowDawnxx
      January 10, 2008
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      ya prob a little too graphic... bet you never wanna meet me now, lol. Worrying thing is, I could get worse but didn't want to offend anyone . Bet your writes great, I'll check in ein minutein! x


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    January 10, 2008
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    Wow this is beautifully fucked up and morbid, it#'s fantastic really great work

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