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Slaughter

Slit his throat in
the dead of night.
Eat his intestines
from his dead body.
Grab a gun and blow
his fucking head off.
Slaughter him in
this dark hour.

So he thinks that he
can steal from me.
He has not seen the true
demonic nature in my heart.
To stab,rip,tear,and mutilate
his body right now is my goal.

Now that he has crossed
me i will kill him.
Put him six feet under with
the rest of his family.
He made the mistake of
crossing me for the last time.

now he will be begging me for mercy
for i will hold his fate in my hands.
Killing him would be
so very easy to do.
So i will slaughter and
kill him dead tonight.

Murder.
Death.
Kill.
SLAUGHTER.

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  • Maili Knephthan Greeters member
    June 1, 2009

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    This was rather gory. I like it very much though I like dark writes. You did a good job on this piece. Thank you for sharing it.


  • Juggalette Sammy
    May 21, 2009
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    This was gorrific. lol

    But not quite the take on the prompt that i was looking for. I was looking for the cutters, the suicidal. Not the murderers, or the angry. It can stay in the contest, but it doesn't have much value to this contest. It doesn't go well with the prompt.

    Thanks for entering anyway though!

    Great job on writing it. I can really tell you were angry.
    So the imagery was perfect.


  • Anemone-Rose
    November 4, 2008
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    whoa, such crazy madness, emotion of anger and rage, of blood thirst revenge. very nice.

  • Virgoan silver member
    April 7, 2008

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    dark...very dark. i like how you have contemporarily created this piece.

    Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

    HENSLEY


  • liduen silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    CCCCRRREEEEEEEEPPPPPYYYYYYYYY!!!! But in this poem thats a good thing Good job, you need to put the option number in the authors notes


    • liduen silver member
      March 16, 2008
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      ooohhh...this can't be option 5 too. The rules clearly state that you can do up to 3 entries, but they must be different options. Please, either find a way to change the option of 1 of them or choose 1 for me to DQ. Im sorry


  • Florida Sunshine
    February 24, 2008

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    Intensely scarey ~ fast read ~ and quite different to say the least ~ I enjoyed reading it ~ Thanks so much for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ best of luck to you!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 18, 2008

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    Fantastic piece...love the gruesome imagery you've used...awesome piece!! Best of luck in the contest with it


  • Lady Nightshade
    January 27, 2008

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    this is cool as fuck but REALLY FUCKING WRONG.it is seriously clear that my contest was one on love.yeah dark stuff but this is way beyond dark,its sick.

    Obviously you didnt read ANYHTHING and i find that really insulting.


  • Digital-coma
    January 17, 2008
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    OMG OMG!

    THIS IS FUCKIN HOT!!!!!!!!
    HOLY HELL I'M A SICK FUCKER. This would be THE WORLD'S BEST WAY TO DIE.......i love these lines:

    "Slit his throat in
    the dead of night.
    Eat his intestines
    from his dead body."

    Very impressive i must say, DEFINITELY in the finalist. just.....WOW......KUDOS


  • N e a r
    January 16, 2008

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    This is definitely a violent and hard-core poem... very emotional in a dark way. I don't think it's right for this contest, since it focuses more to your emotions on a certain event and past than who you really are.

    As a poem, though, it's a good way of releasing your pent up anger and emotion. It's way writers use to write, and you expressed yourself clearly and soundly.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • aligurl
    January 14, 2008
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    wow. A very angry poem. I liked the sheer expression of this. However, I think some imagery or something would definately add to the affect and it might be easier to realte to or understand if there was some context in it. Like why you were pissed off or something like that. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.


    • SHadowHex666
      January 15, 2008
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      so

      read the reason why i wrote this poem in my authors notes and you will know why i was so pissed off


  • Xx Luna xX
    January 14, 2008
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    Thank you for entering

    This is so raw and filled with anger. I love it... Good job

  • Nighttime angel
    January 13, 2008

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    I love this poem. I love dark writes a lot and this is filled with imagery that is astounding. I am very impressed with this. I love the last 2 stanzas.
    good luck in the contest.

    kat


  • Aventura
    January 13, 2008
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    First stanza: I wasn't sure if this was a command. It was sick but wholly unoriginal.

    Second: Think about "so". Do you REALLY need it here? The unoriginality of this piece is starting to irk me. Where's the imagery.

    I had to laugh at the rest.
    Smh...
    Stop whining.
    Keep writing


  • my--i u--k i
    January 10, 2008
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    *grabs a knife*
    LETS GO MURDER PEOPLE TOGETHER
    ell oh ell.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 10, 2008

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    HEHE sound like you were ticked of Great poem
    Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest I wish you the best of luck

    Redwing Spirit

  • SHadowHex666
    January 10, 2008
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    MAN I SURE WAS TICKED OFF WHEN I WROTE THIS POEM


    • brittany lee
      January 13, 2008
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      well i'm sorry you got that pissed off, but this person you're talking about doesn't deserve death over what he did.

      but i do like the poem.
      just not why it was wrote. or who it was wrote about.

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