Lost on an island of your absence,
I'll kiss seal my one last message...
And, since I never thought it through,
It will only say "I love you"...
Author notes
For Tarja's "Message in a bottle" contest...option 2. Written in hope of my soul-mate finding it. Sorry for it being so short, I just haven't felt that I should write a letter in the bottle...
A contest entry
- 145th Contest by Tarja.
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Looking forward to your opinions...
Comments
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Oh this was lovely..I really like how short it is but theres so much going on with it.. you did a wonderful job.. thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck.
Angel
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I'll kiss sealed my one last message...
here it might be better to say - i kiss sealed or i'll kiss seal...
other than that one line... a good poem but i did notice you are from romania so english is not the first language
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wow I never thought that such a small amount of words, could be better then something that has many.
I really enjoyed this beautiful, interesting short poem.
It truly was a great read, and I think it shows alot of emotion..
I've always wanted to recieve a message in a bottle.. I think if I got one like this, I'd be happy for a long long time. LOL!
Thanks for making my day
K.M xoooo
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Aw, I'm glad I made your day a little brighter!
As for the bottled messages...I've always wanted to get one too! I think that...someday I'll find one. I just hope I'll be able to decipher it. LOL.
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Those three words, simple and symbolic; they represent everything of love.
This is a beautiful short piece.
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Isn't it? Thank you!!
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Aww, that's really, really sweet and sometimes that's just what love is like.
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Aw, thank you, fleur!!
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Short yes, but sometimes less is more and in this case it is so. I truly did enjoy your entry... I hope you find your soul mate.
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aw well ain't this just as sweet as sweet can be. I've always wanted to find a message in a bottle, but I guess who hasn't...
short and sweet, as they say
good work,
Creatress
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Well, maybe with some good luck on your side, you will, Creatress!
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Short but sweet. I like it. Gives a vast image with few words, and you've captured the way how love cannot be expressed in a thousand words, but the few simple words 'i love you'.
Great. Keep writing!
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Thank you
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