because I'm choking you
hand on your throat
pressing
suffocating
you're turning blue now
I could take my hand away but there's no point
you're drowning in your own fat
YOU DON'T DESERVE TO LIVE
and now you won't anymore
Author notes
hun.....as soon as I figure out what inspired this,
i'll letcha know.
A contest entry
- You have COMPLETE CREATIVE FREEDOM!!!!!!!! by Twosoulsasone.
465 points, ended January 23, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how can i make this FRICKING RROOOOOOOOCK
Comments
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This seems to me like it was inspired by something deep in your sould. It could have been anger or maybe love, what ever inspired it its a little scary, but its a good wirte. There is expression and emotion in it and that is what i like to see. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Wow, this poem is actually quite powerful, let alone a little frightening.
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