Can I have you now?
In the darkest recesses of your thoughts
have you imagined this?
The touch of my lips upon your skin
Kisses that leave you breathless
Hands that caress every inch of you
Eyes that see your soul…
Can I have you now?
Do you feel me watching you
slip out of your clothes?
Revealing soft breasts with light brown peaks
The smooth skin of your stomach
A mound of flesh with sculpted cover
Long legs and muscled calves…
Can I have you now?
Am I the one that can make you feel
like no other has before?
Make love to you, endlessly
Feel the softness inside of you
Taste the sweetness of your love
Hear you moan in - ecstasy…
Can I have you now?
A contest entry
- Sensual Style by SummerlandRayne.
939 points, ended January 21, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sensually Erotic - Now open for Prewrites by sensualbutterfly.
450 points, ended September 27, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sizzling Hot by Fire-Fly.
500 points, ended November 25, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Really like how you've written this poem - the repetition of 'can I have you now?' fits perfectly - you've struck any excellent balance.
Thanks for entering and goo luck in the contest. -
Very beautiful, the sensuality is so elegant and classy, exactly what I wanted.
Great Job
~Serenity -
Hm...
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Nicely penned.. I like how you wrote this. Ty and Gl in the contest.
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A most beautiful and softly spoken piece, with a class of the sensual, thank you for entering and good luck in my contest, Josie
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Very nice. The images that flash through my mind are... exhilarating to say the least!
"The touch of my lips upon your skin
Kisses that leave you breathless
Hands that caress every inch of you
Eyes that see your soul…"
Those lines... wow... Thank you for entering and for following my rules -
Sensitive
So sensitively delivered...yet full of passion and expectation.
Quietly seductive
Lillianna
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Seems as if an answer is required or a responsive comment. Very smooth and easy reading slipping inside the reader's mind. Well composed and quite affective!
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So sensually erotic! Glad I open this contest to prewrites!! Made me tingle from head to toe!! Wonderful sexy write! Thanks for entering
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What a beautifully sensual poem! There is an intensity as the piece continues from line to line...emphasized by the repetition of the line "Can I have you now?"
Very tastefully written and such a pleasure to read!
Such a wonderful writer you are! Congrats on the well deserving award!
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Oh my!! Um.. *wipes brow*.. very sensual... I LOVE it... hope you have more of these for me to read!!
And... I just have to say YAY you mentioned muscular calves hehe. I have very muscular legs so I'm digging that you dig them... yippee!! lol
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Goodness Michael - Whew! Such a steamy write from your wonderful pen. Let me catch my breath.....
Excellent.
~Pamela
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just rereading
yeah, I still really like this -
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You flatter me...
Thank you....Michael
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This is lovely, full of sensual visuals and loving expressions. Very lusty. Well done. Enjoyed this read.
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sighs....
deep breath
another deep breath
clearly you made the reader feel your seduction
very well done
blessings,
Michelle
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Thank you for the comment.
I appreciate it.
Michael
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Gracious.......need some COLD COLD AIR!!!!! This is so sensual......Good luck in the contest
Lady D
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Om my! Well...let me catch my breath here. This is sensual style for certain. I need to read this once again! Thanks for the entry and best of luck in the contest!
Az
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Thank you for your comment, azlyn. That's very kind of you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Michael
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Enjoyed it several times Michael!!!
My pleasure indeed!!!
Az
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