little speckles
of shades of lavender
with a hint of blue
slow waves
crash the beach
along with the gentle breeze
of an unknown
realm
a lone bottle
sails along
with a cork
tightly fastened to it
inside it lays
a note-
who knows what it may contain?
a love letter probably
opening it up,
I sense
fate
Author notes
option 1~
A contest entry
- 145th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 11, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really admired how dramatic the last three lines were played out... I could feel a sense of intensity and in that... the reader leaves with a regretful feeling that that is the end! But I think that is smart... it wasn't like something was missing, rather like the ending of Gone With the Wind... you're left wondering but satisfied... thank you for entering and good luck.
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