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Paradise

How Hard Can This Be??

I Ask the man At Lowes,

I said man will you listen, will you listen to me,

will you listen to me please?

I want to build a deck, see a real big deck

this deck man, I want it up into the sky please.

Can you tell me how to get it up there I have four big trees.

Now Mr man I sort of have a plan if you will shush up laughing,

Men! Just sale me the deck stuff man I 'll figure out the rest my self.

 

Took all the wood and stuff home pondered on this while cleaning stalls,

Thought about all those advertisements on TV.

Talked to Red wind, Prissy girl and LouLou we all agreed TV never did make good advice

so we pulled out the yellow pages.

There it was dream houses called them, they fit us in... put our deck right in the sky.

oh oh oh stairs right up a roof part over prissy and I were in paradise...

until we got the bill only ten thousand eleven hundred dollars and we did not even have running water!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • BellaD
    August 13

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    I love how you so aptly capture time and place with your narrative style. Great use of dialect, too.

  • This was nice, I always wanted to live in a tree as a child, invite me over sometime

    ps - you're right, a woman going into Lowe's or similar alone and they look at you like you have six boobs and a flashing neon sign over your head reading 'idiot' *sigh*

  • Nighttime angel
    January 18
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    Rheea, thats a heck of a lot of money for a deck. should have called me, I would have tried at least[not the I can build a deck] but for you I have done my best. just so you, Lou Lou, Red Wing, Prissy Girl and you could have a little bit of paradise. I love this poem, its one of my favorites.. great job.

    kat
    sister pot


  • arafura
    January 10

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    shit...!

    What a lot of money for that... sounds like you and Red Wing, and Lou Lou and Prissy girl need a handyman! Great fun to read my new friend!