White grape
silvers sweet smiles
pressing life together.
Crystal within our time tasted
Chablis.
Copyright © 2008
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
Author notes
Chanson : A song - about love or wine
In a list
A contest entry
- chanson: songs of love and wine by Nicolette.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I could taste this one as I read it.
I love what you did with the prompt, Pamela. I really loved the alliteration in the second line. I recently wrote a couple of sea poems using this form. My comfort zone has been free verse and haiku, so I'm trying to branch out more with form poetry. I'm thinking of trying out an etheree next.
Don
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Don
Thank you for such a lovely comment. I had forgotten about this one. So pleased you enjoyed. I will have to get by your page as I get caught up here and look forward to reading your Cinquain.
It is a nice form. Etheree is as well and I think you will find yourself enjoying that one as well.
Thank you again dear soul. Much appreciated. ~Pamela
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Pammie..this delights my senses...crystal takes me to thoughts of clearity and life...and oh how when love swirils in it's glass...sweetly it smells and intoxicates me...beautiful cinquain girl...bravo to you
Mal
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Mal
Thank you so much and congrats on your trophy. Well done. I appreciate your kind words here.
~Pamela
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You did a fine job here of weaving natural grapes, wine and the essence of life and love together, and I can only echo my co-judge's assessment of this very charming cinquain. The syllable count is perfect and I like the way you've played with line breaks, as well allowed each line to make a statement all on its own. A very fine entry indeed - salute!
Thank you for entering this love poem.
~ Nicolette
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Nicolette
Thank you so much. I did enjoy this contest very much. It had been quite some time since I'd written a Cinquain at all. This had such appeal to me and I am happy you enjoyed it. A terrific contest. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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hmmmm this ties it all together wonderfully... Great write. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much. Always such a pleasure to receive your wonderful comments on my writes. ~Pamela
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I like the use of alliteration; it really ties these lines together.
Best of luck.
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XdevilessX
Thank you. I am so pleased for your comment here. ~Pamela
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You're welcome.
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You got me smiling!
Salute, Scribe!
~ Nicky♥
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Nicky
Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this. A new twist to Cinquain for me and I like it ~Pamela
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I love white grapes. I love the way they look. I love the soft, almost onyx gleam and the 'sweat' that always seems to sort of glob off of them and sit on them. They make me want to become a wino. Not only have you brought out the beauty of this, to me, noble fruit, you have described human emotion the tiny pieces of life which make it pretty neat sometimes. This is excellent and charming. I salute you.
Thank you for entering this beautiful poetry in the contest. peace ,,,Moqui
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Moqui
Thank you so much. I am so very pleased for your comment on this piece. I had never heard of chanson before, so I wanted to try. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Salute! Ah, lovely.
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Luna TiqueFringe
Thank you. I am pleased you liked this. ~Pamela
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Ummm yes this is fantastic. Great feeling this leaves the reader with.. Always a pleasure best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Delila
Oh I am so glad you liked this. Thank you for such a wonderful comment. ~Pamela 
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