linger...
this moist flavour,
Intoxicating bliss.
exotic tremors, dance upon
my lips.
In a list
A contest entry
- chanson: songs of love and wine by Nicolette.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This sings to me...for a cinquain to sing is unique...such as this sensual song of love written so delicately by your pen...Bravo to you
Mal
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This is the way your words play upon my mind.
Ohh, I like this!
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I agree with my co-judge's assessment of this cinquain.... a very tantalizing one indeed - and yes, it lingers in the mind. I liked "exotic tremors"...lovely touch of sensuality there. The syllable count is perfect too and I like how each line allows the reader many visuals, yet stand on its own too. A very cinquain.
Thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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Yes that is memorizing to say the least. I think you are a natrual at these. Good luck sunshine I think you will do well.
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now this is hot! best to you in the contest
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Wonderful
Terrific images, great descriptions. Best of luck in the contest.
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exitement lingering is this good erotic piece...so hot...well done delightfullmess
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vividness, I'll send a degree
some fizz fascinating
lengthen a notice was the opening's invitation and it supplied from second line on. qualifying came next, with a little rarity maybe peaking the value in my favorite fourth line. the conclusion was possesing this personally as we followed to brimming...
patterned interest,
also called
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I can almost Taste it...
Quivers you Deliver, Scribe.
~ Nicky♥
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...exotic tremors...
and then some. Oooooh this is such sweet wine. Well done. ~Pamela
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Oh, nice, nice..., as always
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This is beautiful, to say the least. You have a soft, and smooth touch with words here. You mention no colors, yet they suggest themselves. You mention no flavors, yet they begin to creep upon the reader during the fourth or fifth reading of this poem. Your use of words is efficient, yet generously you pour images and feelings into the lines.
Thank you for entering this beautiful poetry in this contest. ,,,Moqui
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oh..I love this.. 'exotic tremors'....for sure..a lovely, sensual cinquain! Good luck in the contest, Delila..
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hrmmm
mmmm
yes
I do believe I like it.
Nice form
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