Smoldering ashes of yesterday
Summer heat still burning deep
Setting fire to what remains.
Flashback spinning room
I think I remember once upon a time
Glimmering beacons stand tall.
Rooftops and rumors
Running never seemed so fun
Until it was done.
Colored flesh forever stained
With memory of magic days.
Fast forward slow down rewind
Flickering images on this screen
Like a movie without a star.
Fading words faint silence
Free fall to forevermore
Morning sun shatters dreams.
Real life storybook endings
Magical nothings strung together
We hang by a cut thread.
Resurrection finding faith
Breathing life into the dead
The tomb is empty.
Miles mount to maintain the distance
A thousand mile missed call
Message says it all without a word.
Midnight is approaching fast
No star crosses tonight
Fading apart diving away
Burnt up in eternal space.
Author notes
i think its done....
In a list
I took your time, now let me have your thoughts....
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i was reading some of your comments and decided i should come read a poem, i really like it. it's so powerful, although you don't really get a clue of what the poem is about. then again maybe i'm not in the right frame of mind. i really like it, great imagery!
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just a friend who meant more and yet nothing has ever come of it. and then references to moments together such as her writing on my arm or a song we both loved which references movies at one point or being on the roof of the building so its just about moments together and then moments apart and that nothing is ever final hmmm..not sure this comment clears it up but i tried lol i think star crossed sums it up
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Beautifully written! I love this! =]
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I could really feel this one. Good write.
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Wow, this is exquisite. Superb imagery. I could feel the last days surrounding me.
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I like this very much. I sense an element of running out of time, your life flashing before your eyes, just snippets of what was. It is very good and has inspired my mind to wander down some old roads.
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nicely written it kind of reminds me of a trip down memory lane... good solid write. I like it. Thanks for sharing this with us. I love your writing as always.
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I really like this poem. Like everyone has already said it takes you on a personal journey through your own past. good job!
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I agree..I felt we were on you meditative journey
and translating with you what we saw and felt.
you did this really well...interesting to read,
and the textures and layers you added pulled us in...
and captivated!
ears/Seattle
loved it!
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again thanks for the kind words and yes it was a kind of meditative experiment to deal with the past and lay it to rest. not sure it did the second part but it definately has helped
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This piece took me on a journey of memories and the imagery and emotion made that journey very vivid. I loved the line:
'Magical nothings strung together'
That is what the small but tender moments and events in life are and that makes them so precious. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece.
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nicely written. Good imagery here.
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So many emotions evoked here, an interesting trip down memory lane.
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This one makes the reader stop and think. A deep one this is. I particularly like: "Free fall to forevermore"
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This Is Something I'd Thought I'd Never Find. Truth Beyond My Understanding Hah. These Lines Wrapped Around My Heart & Mind Like Bobbed Wire.
"Fading words faint silence
Free fall to forevermore
Morning sun shatters dreams.
Real life storybook endings
Magical nothings strung together
We hang by a cut thread."
Fading words into silence that means nothing to anyone in shattered dreams unknown to some. This is A Great Write. Hope to see more of this <3
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its simple its really just about a friend and i and the time we never spent together lol
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I must say I like your work.
This just creeps deeper and deeper into the mind with every line. -
I love the way you’ve been writing lately, really sporadic and convoluted but in a good way- like following a train of thought. Beautifully descriptive and intangible.
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i was reading your poem here while listening to The Vision on the atonement soundtrack check out on myspace it goes with your poem so very well and which the piece reaches me in different ways, different feelings, different memories flood through the mind what this is a masterpiece in its "longer than perfect poetry"
Rooftops and rumors
Running never seemed so fun
Until it was done.
i would highlight the whole piece if i could and if you don't mind as i started reading my brain started ticking and i may want to write something to this piece not sure yet but only if its okay with you my dear
WONDERFUL WORK AS ALWAYS!
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thanks for the kin words and anytime you want you may
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Well it's another one of interest
as usual my dear. I'd expect nothing less from you.
You remind me of Emily Dickerson
with all of her perculiarities
of writing poetry.
I love it nonetheless!
Keep penning!
~The INC."
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wow this holds so much within it and really captured me with different thoughts. i love it well done keep penning
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I actually think you could have ended it after "We hang by a cut thread," but that is just my opinion.
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the reason i dont is I'm trying to tell the full story which kind of stretches out longer than perfect poetry.
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