Pray, think of me
when I am gone
when love is love no more;
Promises, unfulfilled,
life's
vital organ betrayed.
Mazes entwined within the entanglements of the mind
leave only disowned memories.
Haze and mist distort-
resort to loss.
Lies no longer lies,
but present possibilities:
Did he? Did we?
Bewildering misery.
He moves on-
I fall back-
with no one to catch me.
A contest entry
- Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
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Comments
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This is such a sad write, and it really tugs at the heart. I admire the way you descibed your feelings through the vivid imagery like "Mazes entwined within the entanglements of the mind" and "Haze and mist distort". The ending is what really got to me: "I fall back- / with no one to catch me". Sincerely touching.
Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
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Thanks for your comments
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The first line drew me in... the rest of the poem stole my breath... I love the subtle rhyming and the flow of this poem... the ending is a reluctant sigh... Beautifully written!
Keep writing
Polly
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