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... observations and such

Can you sense the
mounting tension;
feel that pull where
 words won't
make a difference?

Women know
jaws clench
and nails
become sharp.

You want to freeze
that frame,
 say "Let's not do this,
can't we step back and
find a way to forget?"
Only we can't.
Once those words left
ruby lips,
hate seeped into
hearts that suddenly turned cold.

Sitting in their midst,
I felt the chill
and wanted a sweater.
Hell I want a vacation,
from the
mind fuck I am giving myself right now.
Somehow I don't sense that is
going to happen.

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  • GypsySyah
    January 11, 2008

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    Great!

    I can picture the woman & how she feels....I know the feeling all too well. You paint the scene so well with your words. Peace- Syah


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 9, 2008

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    There is a fragile person here ready to crack. The sadness is so deep, the emotions so heartfelt. Thoughts just fly though my mind while reading this.
    Awesome piece.
    Soulful Woman


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 9, 2008
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    Sighhh...The comedian Steven Wright once said, "No, we can't go back and change the past; then again, we can't go back and screw up what we did right, either." I always thought it to be quite profound. No, we can't forget. But we can choose to remember the good over the bad. The good is a lot more permanent, my Friend. Wanda

    • Evil Eyes gold member
      January 9, 2008

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      You know what Wanda? I really love your comments.. I don't know if I have ever told you that.. But I really look forward to them.. They make me feel good..

      • Night Hope gold member
        January 9, 2008
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        Always happy to oblige, M'am. Here ya go. Don't take a drink first; you'll choke.

        More humor from the delightfully twisted mind of Steven Wright...

        1- I'd kill for a Nobel Peace Prize.

        2- Borrow money from pessimists - they don't expect it back.

        3- Half the people you know are below average.

        4- 99% of lawyers give the rest a bad name.

        5- 42.7% of all statistics are made up on the spot.

        6- A conscience is what hurts when all your other parts feel so good.

        7- A clear conscience is usually the sign of a bad memory.

        8- If you want the rainbow, you gotta put up with the rain.

        9- All those who believe in psychokinesis, raise my hand.

        10- The early bird may get the Worm, but the second mouse gets the
        Cheese.

        11- I almost had a psychic girlfriend, but she left me before we met.

        12- OK, so what's the speed of dark?

        13- How do you tell when you're out of invisible ink?

        14- If everything seems to be going well, you have obviously
        overlooked something.

        15- Depression is merely anger without enthusiasm.

        16- When everything is coming your way, you're in the wrong lane.

        17- Ambition is a poor excuse for not having enough sense to be lazy.

        18- Hard work pays off in the future, laziness pays off now.

        19- I intend to live forever; so far, so good.

        20- If Barbie is so popular, why do you have to buy her friends?

        21- Eagles may soar, but weasels don't get sucked into jet engines.

        22- What happens if you get scared half to death twice?

        23- My mechanic told me, "I couldn't repair your brakes, so I made
        your horn louder."

        24- Why do psychics have to ask you for your name?

        25- If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you
        tried.

        26- A conclusion is the place where you got tired of thinking.

        27- Experience is something you don't get until just after you need
        it.

        28- The hardness of the butter is proportional to the softness of the
        bread.

        29- To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many
        is research.

        30- The problem with the gene pool is that there is no lifeguard.

        31- The sooner you fall behind, the more time you'll have to catch up.

        32- The colder the x-ray table, the more of your body is required to
        be on it.

        33- Everyone has a photographic memory; some just don't have film.

        And the all time favorite-

        34 - If your car could travel at the speed of light, would your
        headlights work?


        35 - You can't have everything - where would you put it?

        36 - I became a vegetarian because plants were easier to sneak up on.

        37 - I woke up one morning and all of my stuff had been stolen...and replaced by exact duplicates!

        • Evil Eyes gold member
          January 9, 2008
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          23- My mechanic told me, "I couldn't repair your brakes, so I made
          your horn louder."

          oh yeah.. that would be me


  • arafura gold member
    January 9, 2008

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    step back...

    I can feel it my friend... the tension that grows and grows until it crackles between you like static electricity. And for some reason you can't step back... can't take back the words or deeds. This is another gem from you. Bravo!


  • MuddyKing
    January 9, 2008

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    yeah...the tension can change like the weather
    sometimes...just thinking
    can give you the double mind disease
    and girl there is no cure
    you always open up the can of freshness
    thanks for that
    peace and hugs
    Muddy

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