I've sat out on the beach today, every single night.
I wonder when you'll write to me, I miss you when out of sight.
You told me before you left that everything would be okay:
"I'll write you letters, I promise! One for every day!"
I kept you to those words for so long, and I wish you would come back.
But I only have the water to talk to and it does not react.
The sun plays hide-and-seek below the horizon line.
But I still sit here, staring out and I won't leave it behind.
I'm waiting for your letter, still as you are out at sea.
You said you'd send it in a beer bottle, especially for me.
But wait! Out there! Are my eyes being deceiving me?
I think it's a bottle... Is that what I think?
I bolt out into the ocean, getting water in my boots,
And I scoop up the letter I'm sure is from you.
"My dearest," you wrote, "How I miss you so!
The captain says we'll be home soon. Oh, how time goes by slow!
I cannot wait to see you, please tell the children hello.
I'm so sad you are not with me, but I wanted you to know:
I am okay, the ship is fine. It's been moving slowly but with good pace.
But this beauty of a boat can't match the beauty of your face.
And so my love, I bid to you, A goodbye that breaks me heart...
But I will return, soon, my girl, and we'll have a fresh start!"
I refold the letter and walk back to shore, so happy, my heart at rest.
To know that you have been just fine is news among the best!
Author notes
option # 1
A contest entry
- 145th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 11, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is such a sweet poem! The angst that comes along with waiting to hear from the one you love is so evident through your well thought out words. Beautiful write and truly good luck in the contest! Thank you for entering!
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missing someone can burn a hole in ones heart. I pray that your heart will heal soon. thank you so much for entering this contest! We wish you all the best. love becks
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This was fabulous!
I LOVED the rhyming and the flow was so smooth. You did such an excellent job with this! Thank you for the fresh write... I truly enjoyed this.
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:O OMG
OM - STINKING- G!! >>> okay, did my eyes play a bad trick on me or something? last time i checked u picked up every little thing and analyzed poems to correct people in the best way possible... it's helped me with previous poem but i read this and now u didn't say anything was wrong!
I THINK I'M GOING INSANE! THANK U SO MUCH! 
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I loved the rhyme scheme here....it flows wonderfully and I must say that this peice is simply beautiful...I love it. the first few lines just pulled me in and I had to keep on reading, now I wish it hadnt ended so soon! I love this write, beautiful work here.
Take it easy
~Courtney~ aka bleedingeternal
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Tentacles?
Reading this I pictured Elizabeth from Pirates of the Caribbean waiting for Will Turner, and now that I think about it it could've been me waiting for Davy Jones.
All in all this is a very sweet poem, a signature Amishi-style write. I wish you luck in the contests you've entered, because this one deserves the gold.
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XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD thank u! i love that movie. ur right... i didn't think of it at first, but now i think about elizabeth, too..... XDDD weird
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Awwww! How sweet. This is a totally awesome poem. I liked the rhyming couplets. Hehe. Nice job. ^.^
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