Message in a bottle
Drifting out to sea
Oh how I dearly wish
I was inside of thee
For after a long journey
perhaps I'd find myself in hand
of fair maiden,
or a family,
or society of sand
Author notes
I believe it was option 1 for the contest lol, and this was picture inspired
A contest entry
- 145th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 11, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hm...well, what do think really, an honest opinion of what you think of the poem and what you think it means.
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Thank you for the fresh entry... although I have to say I was not all that impressed by this... there was no time to get into it and it just didn't really say much of anything... I think more imagery and personality would help. Thank you for entering though.
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thank you for the honest critique mademoiselle, yes i know about how short it is, there were origanally 2 copies of the poem, but i'd rather the shorter of the 2, leaving room for the reader to think, but if i failed at that, i may go back and edit it, thank you, my apologies you didn't enjoy
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ooooh i like it. it's short but still conveys a sense of greatness. C: nice job!
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Interesting poem. You said a lot with just a little. The wording was wonderful and the rhyme was exceptional. Great poem. ^.^
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