If I could write a message in a bottle
I would write it to my daddy.
It would have in it all that he done wrong
to me and my mommy.
He thinks I have forgotten but I did not,
that is why I dont want to see him.
My letter would say goodbye daddy
we dont need you in our lives mommy does just fine.
Author notes
#2 - What would you send in a bottle to the ocean
A contest entry
- 145th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 11, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 13 and under ages enter your best prewrite Judged by RedwingSpirit.
500 points, ended January 13, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
im only 8 be nice
Comments
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One of the best
This is one of the best poems I have ever read.Good luck!
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Ahhh this is very sad but written well for your age Keep up the excellent work.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this poem into my contest.
I wish you the best of luck
RedwingSpirit
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wow. amazing.
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This is really good sweetheart goodluck to you in this contest with your poem best wishes and much love always
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Thank you sweetheart for this very beautiful poem. I think that you must be a very strong little girl to have the courage to say goodbye to your daddy. I am 19 and I can't seem to forget mine.
Thank you so much for entering this... and Good luck!
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I really like your poem
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A message from the heart ...You are a brave little girl...Keep up your spirits darling...Many and much
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beautiful baby girl
i love you
your very strong rember that -
Genna remeber your daddy will always be your daddy. Anyways very good Genna.
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aw that was great
That was wonderful! That was terrific, was your daddy bad? i hope he didn't hurt you or your mommy, that was a touching poem
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Very powerful piece, Princess. I am glad that things are better now for you and your Mom. Take care and give your Mom a big hug You two will do fine together.
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this is sad hugggggggs you tight
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Oh, Genna... this was very, very powerful. Best of luck in the contest and keep writing!
Jade
EDIT: I fixed your name. I am so sorry... it was an accident!
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Sweetie, this is very powerful. You have a wonderful mommy and you are a little sweetheart. I love you both. -Aunt Nessa
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this is a powerful write sweetie and if i could see your daddy then i would tell hi the same thing as you and mummy are too beautiful to hurt.
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