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Bottled Message

From shore to shore
I brave wild waves
with winds unsure
'bove mermaid cave,
in shine or pour
with message grave
within I store,
from water save.

While currents flow
from East to West
I onwards go
and do my best
to bring words so
they find fair guest
whose heart may know
shared joy unguessed.

Thus bottle green
upon sea blue
will float unseen
by blue sky too,
until the scene
is set for two
to find love keen
which years renew.

 

 

As bottle sent

one April day

I'd spring event

life-changing, May

no sooner spent

saw June display

as covenant

where interplay

would represent

Joy's present - way

to taste sweet scent

as roundelay

was surely meant

all fears to lay

at rest, prevent

guilt complex grey.

Upon time's stream

hope's message came

as true dream's beam

to help two claim

tomorrow's team

free from all blame

could bloom, esteem

helps heart pure flame

complete life's scheme

while spurning shame

as groundless, deem

tomorrow's fame

would show shared gleam.

From bridge of sighs

flow onwards, face -

once shed disguise

and self-disgrace -

joy love supplies

to interface

with wisdom wise

as time and place

dissolve, while cries

one can replace

and recognize

as two embrace

the future lies

ahead ! Displace

forgotten lies

past tears did trace.


One could write on
till cows come home,
unreel tale long
on how to roam
at sea in song,
words honeycomb
in plaits sweet, strong,
'neath starry dome.

But this might bore
fond reader who
could stop before
end comes on cue,
paint stormy roar
and calm - but few
can cope with more
than this so you
must know to woo
was message sent
on Chance's tide
to represent
love none should hide.
Tale ends - Fate meant
two bona fide
to find shared tent,
and there abide ...

Author notes

Background Lake Kremaston Evritania Greece
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  • Lily otv
    January 16

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    A tide that flows
    from East to West,
    when fair wind blows,
    sees bottle blessed,
    as rhythm grows
    upon waves crest,
    words written rows
    advance on quest.

    I think this is a case of two for the price of one and a bargain for the keen observer. The flow of this poem, which reminded me of the ebb and flow of waves on the shoreline, allowed me to sail through it and I could have coped with a whole lot more roaming in song if only you had written till the cows came home.

  • Outstanding

    The bottle seems to have had an exciting journey. I thought this was original and novel with your own distinctive rhyme scheme and great flow. An entertaining poem filled with humour.


  • janejainejayne gold member
    January 10

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    Bravo!

    This should be called Love in a Bottle!
    I believe that the message will be picked up
    on the shore by the intended one!
    That is what happens in Rhyme! Jane


  • Ashleigh London
    January 10

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    Though the rhyme scheme is not one that I usually enjoy, somehow it made it's way subtlety through this poem to where I was able to admire it. You actually took a lot of things I typically do not like in poetry and made them work, so I give you mad props. Thank you for entering and good luck.

  • Night Hope gold member
    January 9

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    "From shore to shore
    I brave wild waves
    with winds unsure"

    I love this poem. Indeed, I do, dear Scribe. Wanda


  • AngelicMistress gold member
    January 9

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    OUTSTANDING!!!!!

    Jonathan:

     

    I have enjoyed this piece for it's uniqueness

    and it's meassge.....

    You have totally transformed yourself into

    the bottle, and carried on it's message as

    required for this contest.....

    Great write, excellent read, good luck in

    the contest.....

     

    Blessed be,

    AngelicMistress...Tanya 

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