The desire I have for you is tremendous.
My fantasies of you seem endless.
You're like a ray of sunshine who brightens my life.
I swear if things were different I'd take you as my wife.
Show you that love is more than a dream.
More than passion or what it may seem.
I'd take you to a hilltop so you could reach for the stars.
Reach beyond your dreams pass Venus and Mars.
I'd look to the sky and release a thousand, white doves.
I'd have them rain upon your soul with messages of love.
Never would love seem so beautiful and real.
Never would emptiness be the way that you feel.
My heart and soul has already been taken.
But the love for my wife has truly been shaken.
Hear what I have to say and listen to every last word.
I love you dear mistress and I hope that you've heard.
Heard that I'm sorry that my life has another.
No longer will I destroy the heart of my sons mother.
Author notes
option # 1 or 2.....more to do with # 2
''goodbyes or lullibyes
option # 1 breakups
option # 3..."love always hurts eventually"
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A contest entry
- Dark Love by InMyFlames.
300 points, ended February 28, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Goodbyes, Are Lullabys by Clinging-to-Life.
900 points, ended April 10, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options by Passionate Phoenix.
300 points, ended March 24, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark (again) loss by Selene Tremere.
400 points, ended March 31, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Love by The Darkness.
300 points, ended March 25, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beautiful Darkness. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended April 23, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - STAY. by DAMSELx.
420 points, ended May 29, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What are your thoughts on this topic?
Comments
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Very well done, my best wishes in the contest.
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excellent write, and beautiful rhyming scheme.
true, this love i guess isn't meant.
but because I'm strongly against what you've written here, I cannot agree with such words or ideals.
this poem is worthy of every trophy, but it will not have mine.
great write
-Thank you for your entry, Angi Terese -
Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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dear, this is a gorgeous poem but you did not read!
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This is very pretty and the words feel meaningful. I see that it's been rather successful in contests but I think there are too many words in it. There are some "but's and that's" etc that could be removed to give it better flow. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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this is beautiful i really like it
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The painful side of love shiines through here. Love it in everyway. I love this part:
Never would love seem so beautiful and real.
Never would emptiness be the way that you feel.
My heart and soul has already been taken.
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lovely purely lovely but i will not make a winner till everyone make there enters
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wow! i loved this...really well written and you managed to show the emotions...great job! thanks for entering and best of luck!
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Wow, as I'm still 15 i can't really relate to this, but that doesn't make it any less of a good piece. Excellent description and really nice imagery.
Good luck and thanks for entering!
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this is the perfect role model for option 3. I have been the mistress before, and it is so hard.
You captured so much emotion in this write, the wording and atmosphere worked so well. I felt really emotional reading this as it hit home to my past.
many thanks for this wonderful piece and good luck xxx -
Forbidden
Nice!! I liked how at first it was from the perspective of one loving someone from a sort of distance... and then the piece flops and you see that the love is forbidden in the sense that the narrator is already betrothed!! (spl?) Scandelous, in a way... but in the end the narrator knows that his duty is to his wife and son. Thank you for the entry!!
"Reach beyond your dreams pass Venus and Mars." This line sounded a bit odd, maybe you need a comma there somewhere, but I'll leave that to you.
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Wow deep and powerful emotions running through this. A beautiful piece, superbly penned. Good luck in the contest
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Wow..Very deep and very clear. I love how your words flow so neatly. Thank you for following my rules and best of luck -
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that was awesum the endin caught me by surprise but it was well written and had a nice flow to it it was truly written from the heart
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Wow
Great job
I Like this write and the rhymes
I’m glad you wrote the last line it’s powerful
I like the whole thing, it’s was a good piece of write dude
Keep writing…
Shuberth
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that is so so sweet i love it! i cant say anything more to the point i dont know what to say, only well done and thanks for entering
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This is an interesting write, something I didn't expect as I was first reading it. There's a lot to say about this write. First, you use some common symbols and word usages, yet you construct them wonderfully into this poem. That, my friend, is amazing and original in itself. Second, the actual topic is rarely touched on such a personal basis, or from what I have seen. This is unlike any other write I've read. The ending was unexpected as well as the actual poem. Great rhyme and flow throughout its context. Nicely done!
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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This was wonderful. Sort of a fresh perspective. Good luck!
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I really like this poem a lot, this makes me think about this one person I know that I can't really be with. Great write you have here... Good luck in my contest.
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This is a beautiful poem; it encases so many emotions such as love, regret, desire, temptation and even pain. I loved it, great job and best of luck to you!
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nice, very well written and a little close to home...I need an option number please and good luck,
Stephanie -
Nice
Very good writing.
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