I wish you knew...
How my heart beats for you.
I wish you knew...
How you fulfill my dreams,
igniting a fire within.
I wish you knew ...
how you consume my nights
with such passion I seem to take flight.
I wish you knew...
How it is you I hear
when another speaks.
I wish you knew...
How you hold the only key
to what lies deep within me.
What my heart and soul so deeply seeks.
I wish you knew...
how powerful this connection is
and what could really be.
I wish you knew...
How you hold the power to release
the intense feelings locked deep within
aching to be freed.
I wish you knew...
How everything I do ...
I do it for you.
I wish you knew ...
I'd give up my all ...
just to spend one day with you.
I wish you knew...
The pain my heart feels
with every beat it beats for you.
I wish you knew ...
A contest entry
- 41-45 ages enter your best prewrite Judged by RedwingSpirit.
700 points, ended January 18, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything 20 entries, prewrites excepted by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended January 28, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow this was wonderful reminds me of my boyfriend such a beautiful write hun you have a strong talent keep at it
xoxo
Tash -
Very deep and heartfelt...sometimes life is so hard when it comes to love...often we are not on the same page at the same time...the flow and repeat lines make this smooth and well written.
Thank you for entering! -
beautiful, sad, longing. i can relate to this too much
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WOW!!...excellent.....hits home
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Sometimes it is hard to connect to someone as deeply as you have connected to the receiver of this piece. I do believe you should try to let them understand how much they mean to you. Hope you get the message accross.
thank you so much for entering this contest! We wish you all the best.
Hope to read more of your work in the future cause I feel we share a connection through this poem.
becks -
Beautifully Written
Such a muse you have found the one who holds the key to our hearts is seldom the one we have. So beautiful and amazing are your words and how easily you transfer your feelings to print great job...
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Excellent Work I think we all can relate to this sometimes.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest I wish you the best of luck
Redwing Spirit
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Mom,
I so know what you mean in these words. I know the feelings that you speak of....
You did a wonderful job here, one can feel the ache deep in your heart for this to be... One can truly feel every word you say.....
Best of luck in this contest!
I love ya mom
Nyetta
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This is a very moving poem. It is so easy to feel the sounds of your heart flowing throughout each line, each word of your poem. It's message reminds me of a lighthouse, reaching out into the abyss, with a heart felt plee. It is so beautifully written....
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Touching
I felt almost a deep sadness when reading this...as if a loss had promoted this poem.It was extremely moving and poignant. Please forgive if incorrect but often a reader draws something from a poem that was not intentional. Beautifully written
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