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Dune

The sun beats down in horizontal slits

through the shade I put up in a futile effort to block the light.

I guess sleeping past noon really is a waste of my time.

 

The wash is running again today.

Millions of gallons of water crashing through the undergrowth

with all the fury of that storm that blew through two nights ago.

The aftermath of destruction leaves us breathless.

 

Thin clouds obscure the sun,

enough that I can look straight at it and not have to look away.

Breathe in the humid air,

and place a finger to my lips

as a tiny lizard scampers across the sand dunes I made with my feet.

 

The desert is beautiful tonight.

All sand and heat and starlight.

Lying on my back at the edge of the Saguaro National Park East,

feeling the Earth spin on its wild path through the heavens.

Author notes

I chose this title because it reminded me of the times when my friends and I drive up Mt Lemmon (in Tucson, AZ) and watch the sun set over the city.

Sometimes, I like to just lie on the ground and tune my soul to the music of the world.

Oh yes, a "wash" is a dry river bed that will run with water after a rain storm. The rain in the mountains funnels down into the washes and then runs out to the sea. It's rather cool, when you think about it.

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  • Celticjedi
    January 18, 2008
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    A very interesting and pretty piece! I love how you wrote it. The last stanza speaks volumes more than the others, but together they create the feelings and life of a person. On line 6 though you added an extra "the" and on line 9 is "that" supposed to be "though?" Just checking. Great job. Thanks for entering and keep it up.
    ~Cj


    • pointlessdayz
      January 18, 2008
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      Thank you for pointing out the extra "the" in line six, but in like nine, it is supposed to be "that." As in "there are enough clouds in the sky that I can look at the sun with the naked eye." make sense?

      Thanks for this contest, it was awesome.