etched in the dusk’s breast
the albumen pearls testify - the love
I moor fragments of my fantasy with
mangled within the strings of lunacy,
my heart weaves a secret desire
to garner all the dreams
…in the kaleidoscope of life
~with you
just a mere thought of you
seeps the blushing wine in my capillaries
and seams my frayed heart
…in a knitting of orchid caress
Oh! I wish…
~to lock you for eternity
in the carpels of beating amaranth
hemmed in by my ribs
inside the cradle of my dreams
i begged the oceans
to unfurl my love in letters
b u t…
the reality shadowed my imagination
and left me…
…with an endless moist on my lashes…
Author notes
~inspied by karamelkandy and asfand's style of penning...xD
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Comments
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Good Luck!
Fantastic piece. Really loved the last line! Thanks for entering!
~Tabitha -
I love your use of anatomy here. It just adds an extra descriptive element to it.
the albumen pearls testify - the love
I moor fragments of my fantasy with
mangled within the strings of lunacy...this was my favourite bit. I couldn't even begin to tell you why haha...I just like the flow of it. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck
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thank you !! ~.~"
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The contest you entered this is was for gold winners only. You only have silver and bronze for this. Sorry =(
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awwww I like the ending... moist on the eyelids... tears this is a very good write. I really do like it a lot. thanks for sharing and thanks for entering into my contest.
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I usually don't like freeverse, but I must say that this BLEW ME AWAY! I absolutely loved it. The imagery you used was perfect and beautiful and it really flowed like a poem instead of a letter or story as most freeverse sounds to me. Thank you for entering my contest!
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A beautiful piece of poetry. You have a great talent. Pen on.
Slayer -
I adore this piece.
I'm keeping it in the contest.
Thank you for entering and good luck ♥
-rainbow -
thank you for entering. I enjoyed the entry very much.
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Wow quite the imagery in this one, and excellent choice of language!
Great work, good luck!
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A wonderful write. You've done a great job with this. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work.
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Remarkable,i didnt think that i will finish it cause my brain is numb,i've been reading and writing for 13 hours now,but really remarkable..Bravo.
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definitely reminds me of asfand. nice use of vocabulary. well done.
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I really love that ending stanza! It's just so well written, and I felt like waking up from a dream and having to deal with reality. Good job!
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This is really beautiful... I loved the metaphors and imagery...
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