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A Loose Feather - Silver



Feather-floated on spiritual air:
kissed by slanted slats of serendipity,                  I weave beautifully,
air cleanses my very shaft, caresses each filament,
                                                            free-flying;
betimes, drug down by shadows, suspending
joy but for a moment, then swift swoop
to know sod more intimately                          snagged
by quick claw of creation’s angst.
Tethered,                                    very aware of the breast I came from.






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  • Utok Bulinaw
    January 9, 2008

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    The sense of fleetness in the beginning gives a dreamlike feel to the poem. But the rest of the piece moves the reader into a swift air of sorrow. And yet despite the mention of shadows, sod, claw and angst; I believe the poet only wishes to convey the nature of humanity. This reminds me of Eve and how the fate of humanity changed the moment she spoke to the serpent. As her daughter, (basing from the ending phrases) the poet displays an acceptance of creation's imperfections. This has an undeniable depth to it that invites the reader to glide into its shadows. Thank you for entering.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      January 11, 2008
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      Thank you for the trophy. Life can be so much, that loose feather... I appeciate your comments.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 9, 2008
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    You made the floating of a feather simply beautiful.
    Wonderfully written.
    Soulful Woman