If I told you that I loved you
Would you be terribly surprised?
For I can't find my heart now
I lost it in your eyes
Reason tries to tell me
That it's just another crush
But it's never lasted so long
And never hurt so much
But you're too free and friendly
To ever be tied down
You're the head ringmaster
And I'm just another clown
Author notes
Grr. Bad rhyme and cliche topic. I can't seem to get much out at the moment.
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i actually do not like rhyming poems much unless they are sing-song-suess types... but i loved this one... cliche or not... last line delivers such a punch to the piece... great work...
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well i loved reading it the flow was good to me, you are a good writer i am loveing it, keep up the work
nessa -
Ahhh yes perhaps slightly cliche, but still wonderful! I like it a lot, love the ending, It made me giggle a little and nod because I feel you. Nice!
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I actually really like this, it might be a cliche topic but it's still written well in my opinion and isn't well written and emotion the main factors of poetry?
Great job, I like it
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this is acattly very good
and even chiche can be great
love ya sis -
No, not bad dear. Yes, somewhat cliche, but workable nonetheless I feel. Overall, I like the underlying theme of this one. It's not bad poetry. Just go back and input more poetic devices when you can and or when you feel the urge to do so.
~The Inc."
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